Abluvion

The first thing that caught my eye was that this book is Completed... After reading initial chapters I was completely hooked. The writing style keeps you wanting for more and this novel does satisfy your hunger for a good read. Just read this book. It is worth it. I am looking forward for your next work!!

Awesome novel!!!! Honestly, this is kind of the wrong website for this type of novel because only ongoing novels get attention here. The story, the characters, the plot, the setting everything was masterfully done. I hope the author can keep pumping out good books like this one.

This book is having great potential. The novel has a good plot and is promising. I love the pacing of the novel and the way writer writes the story. The writer is successful in appealing to the readers . I will desperately wait for the next chapters to come . Grammatical errors can be ignored as the author has used simple and understandable speeches. And hope that the writer will continue her awesome work and will evolve even more with time .

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So, swap review. A bit late, so I apologise. Fair warning before I begin, I am a picky reader and have a really high bar when it comes to reading...the joys of having read so much ): I'm really really sorry if it comes across as harsh. I also I am not a big fan of first person pov, so I don't really know the ins and outs when it comes to writing like this. I read the first 13 chapters, so my review will be solely on this. I want to say amazing work with the worldbuilding! There was no info dump in the beginning but it was peppered throughout the first 7 chapters. To be honest, and this is just my opinion, I was pretty confused by all the information on the androids because there was so much and I couldn't focus on the story because I had to keep going back and forth. Character development so far is pretty good, we get a sense of the important characters. It's just, with first pov the character's voice has to be strong and stand out, but it felt that the voices of the different characters at time mixed together and ended up sounding familiar. Writing quality is quite good. I'll be honest, I usually stay clear off firs pov writing because I find it lacking, but you managed to capture my attention and had me wanting to keep reading. I was not bored or annoyed that it was first pov, which just shows that you are a good writer. However, it was a bit disappointing to get to chapter 8 onwards because it felt a bit dry to read. No offence. I just felt like the quality dropped. If you revised it once or twice, I'm sure that will definitely improve. Really strong beginning. Story development I think the story development is great. There is a clear goal and high stakes, also conflict. But like I said earlier, although the plot is good, the development after chapter 8 is a bit slow and I just find it hard to immerse in the story. There is a lot of conflict, but I think if it was presented a bit differently you would be able to keep the momentum up. Unfortunately, I really found that dialogue lacking. I know it's that horrible thing we all dread, and to be honest I struggled with it a lot too until recently. I recommend Jerry Jenkins youtube video on dialogue. It's really good and it helped me improve so much. I also feel that you could have used dialogue to hint at what happened to Darius. And sometimes it felt a bit jarring the way the flashback begun because it felt like you were thrown in it suddenly. I really liked how foreshadowing was peppered in. I just wished that Darius' relationship with Rinthe was developed better because it felt empty and superficial somehow. I don't know how to explain it properly, it's just that I had really high hopes for the development of their relationship, and it felt a bit lacking the further in it got. I know they are supposed to be strangers, but I don't think it did them justice and it didn't show the dynamic properly. It's just that their dynamic has a lot of potential you could cash in to add conflict and tension in the chapters. I think pacing also needs to be improved a bit because the beginning was really nicely done but somehow after chapter 8 I just did no longer want to read. I recommend Alexa Donne, Diana Callahan, The creative Penn, Jenna Moreci, etc. who have really good insights into many of these things. I was a bit disappointed by the villain as well. He did not have a big impact, but I did like how you showed his tyrannical side when he punished Lenin. All in all, really strong start. The middle needs a bit smoothing over and I'm sure it would be even better. I'm really sorry again if I come across as harsh. And I don't mean to be offensive. This is just my opinion. Best of luck

Abluvion is a dystopian fairytale, filled with mystery and human interactions akin to Atsuko Asano's Light Novel, No. 6. From the start, it was gripping and burst with intrigue. Mystery leads the readers onwards, but it is the humanity in such a scientifically-driven world that makes this webnovel shine. In truth, there is room for more improvements, but if polished, it can be a formidable read. On a personal note, I found the ending too rushed, and the middle parts too dragged out. One should place importance in every action and scene so that it keeps the readers interested. Switching to a different character's POV is well, but it should be done in the right times and in the right amounts. There could have been more character building to Rinthe and Darius, in my opinion. <SPOILER> The twist in the ending also seemed contrived, as little hints of it happening were presented before (all I found was of Cana and Magic Users, and they never were explained). In general, I found loopholes as well, but I won't elaborate too much. I believe the author can read through this again and make it better. All in all, great job! Sci-fi of this quality is hard to find in this site, but this could really improve with more practice and polishing. Kudos, and keep writing!

Okay the novel has an intriguing story line with a unique concept. I'm hooked just reading a few chapters already but needed to review fast lol so i'll be continuing after that. I'm enjoying the style, different ways you have used to provide all that is required for a good novel. I'm happy its Completed yay!

I love your writing style and the fact that the book is short and complete, I don't have to read 300+ chapters makes it even better (I get bored easily).

One of the few times that someone decided to mix the world of magic and androids together. Now i have another book to always look forward to reading

Amazing plot, the author's writing style and how smooth the story goes keeps the readers hooked. The world the author build is solid and I love the sci-fi concept it's really captivating. Good work.

It's really satisfying to read a completed book. The storyline was awesome. It got me hooked till the last chapter. You have a really beautiful writing style. I can't wait for more of your works.

Rate rate five five fiiiive hahaha I only got to read the first chapter and second Is very interesting and my kind of genre in the story, I love it I will continue reading more If I got another free time again keep going author niim.

The story has a way to draw the reader into it. I like the author's writing style and how the plot is propelled forward and connected to the next chapter. I have yet to finish the whole story but I'll make sure to reach the end. Thank you, author, for this wonderful story.

I love the twist and how you reel people into the story. Love the sci-fi character and environment. Not what I usually read, but this is interesting. I think the formatting can be improved. But overall it's intriguing to read and see what happens next.