A Fool's Dream
Fate's full of unpredictable events, it will give you something that's life changing or it will give you nothing at all
Once, I was stand at the top but now I'm not anymore
The hunter had become the prey and the prey had to survive each days
Stars in the night sky is something I only gaze upon from afar, but now I travels to hundreds of it
My name's Zhoutian... and this is my story...
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Author note : hi, it's my first story to write and maybe the story would be confusing at first few chapters but everything would be slowly explained in later chapters. English is not my native or first language so there's maybe would be many grammars mistakes, but If you guys is alright with it, welcome aboard!
PS : there would be some curse words in this story so I warn you in advance if you are not alright with it
Another PS : the story real journey would really start at the volume 2. Volume 1 only told the MC world background
my side story : https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/14972925506410405?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4304972744
I have to admit, I'm hooked. The cultivation system is thought out, very traditional. I like the mc, its more rare to have one instantly op but it's a change of pace. Only complaint i could have is the few grammatical ones, but its nothing unreadable.
Those looking for some fantasy and adventure, then this is for you! The author does a good job in building the world and characters. I'd love to follow their journey more! Keep it up!
It's a good story for the most part, of course the grammar has room for improvements but that's not a problem at all, I like the main character, but as he is already developed at the beginning it poses the problem of him seeming kind of dull.
Quoting the title I'm really looking forward for the story to justifiably fit tp that. Talking about the plotline it's for the fantasy lovers who wants the fusion of action. The actionscript is really compelling along with the world background matched to it. The error lies with the punctuations as there aren't any stops or pauses to indicate the structural analysis of the story. Yet it's readability is fine with the good vocabulary. ❤
I enjoy reading this one. It had a really nice and interesting plot line. I can see some typographical error but it's okay because It did not mess up with the story. Have a nice day ahead.
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Hey guys! The story is amazing. Just a glimpse of one chapter just boom! captivated my attention and It seems like I can't stop reading until the end cos of your good work.. Nice work and keep it up. 👍
The story is attractive and eye catching. There are some typos, but it wasn’t that noticeable. You can already be attract to the synopsis. So keep it upppp .....
First story indeed :D Looks promising, but there's still plenty to improve - especially in formatting and capitalization of letters. Here's my initial review as a support (subject to changes, once book is complete) Cheers, RandomGuy!
I gave u 5⭐️ for the story and detailing. Im not gonna go through grammar issues and full stops. I know you are aware of it. The story itself was good enough to get 5 stars. Keep writing and I’ll support you 😉good luck!!!
Like the writing and the story, especially with the main character that looks awesome, nice. Although some words looks more longer but it's still okay. And some parts are still confusing but I would see how it goes
Liking the story so far. The author described the realms well and was very vivid in narrating the scenes. Though I am not into fantasy novels, this got me interested. My only comment so far is the lack of the use of punctuations, particularly a period. Still, it did not affect how the story was told so it's not a big deal.
I liked the story, it has typos, but it does not disturb the reading. Keep up the good work. I am curious to see how the story will develop. I look forward to seeing the next chapter.
I read this up to chapter 13 I did not know what to expect when I read the synopsis, but once I read the story, it was pretty impressive. The author did an excellent job with writing on the world background. The description was good and vivid. The story definitely has potential. I don't usually mind grammar and misspellings, but I hope the author can look at the punctuations. Also, some of the paragraphs were too long. It would be good if you can break them up into shorter sections. Good luck, author!