The Elemental Knights
Have you ever had a book that you meant the absolute world to you? One you would read over and over again just because you loved it so much? What would you do if you suddenly had the opportunity to explore the world you loved so much? To be able to meet all of the characters you dreamed of somehow meeting. Would you take the leap? Even if you didn't know how you'd get home?
Well fortunately or unfortunately, Casey Bennett got that chance when he fell into the world of "The Queen's Riders". His entrance into his beloved book may not have been done willingly nor was it very smooth, but he is there nonetheless. His only clue to getting home lies at the end of the story. However, there's a catch, the story he knows so well and the story unfolding in front of him are slightly different. Given a power that had been hidden away for 500 years, Casey must find a way to limit these differences in order to bring about the ending written in his book. A task made even more difficult by the fact that his own presence is already bringing about changes.
With the help of the story's protagonists, he must navigate through this world that is both familiar and completely alien if he has any hope of going home.
When I first read chapter 1, I was instantly hooked. You see I’m a first-impression-matters kind of person. The author conveyed detailed description without being overly intrusive. Grammar has little to no errors. Intriguing plot paired with an intricate writing. Nothing much I could really critique. Good job.
The plot itself is amazing, the writing is well thought and creative. It's easy to imagine all the scenarios taking place, plus, the characters are lovable. Nice work👍👍👍
I'm not here for grammatical errors as I am bad at it. But my experience when I'm reading your novel is good. Though what I found a bit concerning is paraphrasing. Few paragraphs are just too long and look like a block of words if you're reading it by mobile phone. I suggest you make the paragraphs shorter. Good luck author, may God bless you in your writing career
I like how you introduce the central conflict right away. You explain what is happening without dwelling on unnecessary details. It's awesome that women are knighted in this universe.
Wow, what an experience after reading your story. I know it has the same plot like transported to other world, but you placed a different twist on it. It may have long paragraphs, but I like it. I got a better picture of that world. Keep it up!
The author doesn't have many grammatical errors which is a blessing tbh. I am tired of reading works which are peppered with grammatical errors. Anyways, the author has a good grasp of the English language which makes for a good read where the reader doesn't have to keep on correcting the sentence in their own mind. Though the paraphrasing could use a bit of work, it doesn't take away from the enjoyment of reading the story. I would recommend shorter sentences and paragraphs. All the best for your future endeavors, Author!
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Not bad! But bruh! The chapter is so long haha. You need to break paragraph and also, the MC's reaction doesn't really fit for someone who suddenly find himself in an unknown land. He's too cooperative with the situation and made it less exciting. Those were my thought, others may be cool with it! The story looks good and grammar is nice! Wish you all the best.
I think your paragraph is too long. you can cut it into pieces. how much word in the second chapter? It's very long chapter. you can mix the tought of the main character, rather than using too much description. and what's wrong with the main character? It's reincarnation story. He must be dumbfounded first with the situation rather than walking around like know everything.
Lovely story and interesting characters. What I love the most till now is how the plot is unfolding and the world lore. Apart from a few grammar errors here and there. The story is pretty awesome.