everyone in the ancient and most noble house of Jerrison is killed with the exception of the newborn who was transported away Thomas Jonathan Jerrison will he survive or will he join his family in the great beyond

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the rise of the dragon of jerrison

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I stopped at the second chapter but It's sufficient to say that what I read was a draft. A 6 months old baby  remembering his parents death why not ( traumatic experience so it's remembered ), but that he remembered and used a detection spell at 11 without a wand or formation... that ain't reasonable author. 

Next, Dumbledore ripping off students and the MC's only reaction is to accept but with conditions... once again that ain't reasonable author. 

A Phoenix popping out of nowhere in gringots and becomes his pet just like that... once more that ain't reasonable author. 

And last but not least, he becomes the heir of the Black house and just tell Arcturus Black "okay, I take the heirship but the Black house will follow my politics and fuse with the Jericho house under the Jericho name, to which Arcturus accept just like that... if it was to do that, he would have given the heirship to Draco Malfoy ( his mother's a Black ), or Potter ( his grandmother 's a Black) or any other for that matter, with only 28 families of noble purebloods, there were a lot of marriage between the families... so once last, that ain't reasonable author. 

It's good to have ideas but you need to introduce them and explain from where it cames and how it cames.

By writing a fanfic you don't have to create the rules of the world and background of all the characters, but at least present your OC, willing suspension of disbelief only goes so much...

Thus the note isn't high but I hope that you can reflect on the points above and maybe next time I'll take pleasure to read your story and give you a good review ;) 

Reads like  an abstract as everything feels like rushed dot points as opposed to a story.

Things happen without explanation or clear logic / reason which leaves me wondering what the hell is going on.

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