The King (Kralyat)
Balhkara – a kingdom once known for its glory and beauty before corruption and exploitation left its people gobbled up by hatred and greed. Twenty years ago, that kingdom lost its last King and since then it had been slowly sinking in an endless pit of the abyss. Even though no one knows how the King died and who was responsible for the royal family’s demise – the story has it that the late King was betrayed by someone close. One version of the story has it that his second wife was a spy and killed him, then burned his children during the infamous “Palace Accident”. Another version has it that a maid was jealous of the Queen and poisoned the whole family. With time passing, the story twisted further and blurred in with people’s imagination to the point that no one truly remembers the initial version. After twenty years, one day three hunters from Balhkara receive a mysterious invitation for a private mission. Upon meeting the employer, they learn that the Prince of Balhkara is still alive. Will they manage to find the Prince? Will that Prince, however, return to his rightful place and restore the glory of Balhkara? A story that is full of adventures, moral dilemmas that creates an allegory of today’s world and its state.
A masterpiece! I love stories which are rich in descriptions, world-building and slower plots because they gave a better reward in the end and much more extensive immersive experience. This story has got everything. From a well-paced plot to beautifully made characters and lore. The characters are dynamic and their mentalities are well explained. They seem very much alive. The world, its culture and traditions make it feel very real. The narration is done expertly, allowing me to immerse in a wonderful experience. The story has got a continuous build of suspense, which pays off well. My recommendation for possible improvement, 1 - I felt the MC does not care about his sister, because he noticed that his sister is going to the rose gathering ceremony and he really did not make much of a comment about it. In contrast to how he cared about his father and mother. This was highlighted for me since his teammate was worried so much about his daughter's rose gathering ceremony. 2 - When I first read about the current King, I was under the impression that he was part of the country. However, later it was told that he had some affiliation with another kingdom. This made me a bit confused. Overall, it was a great read. I added it to my Library looking forward to reading more.
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Greetings to the author! Since you've agreed, I will give my honest review. Status: Chapter 19 First of all, the narration of the novel is superb; therefore, I'd like to compliment the author! Everything is perfectly written with little to no mistakes at all. Above chapter ten or so, there were some prepositions which were used incorrectly but they are only a few. (Very few) Word choice is great as well. The author obviously has good naming senses. I find the names of every character unique and impressive. The setting, the weather, the place, every single one of them was described perfectly to the point I feel like I'm inside the novel. I also find the plot interesting, having that attention-grabbing factor which makes me want to read further. It's not an error but I'd like to suggest to the author to keep "that" minimal so it won't seem wordy. Example: Chapter 16 paragraph 1: "The late afternoon was charged with the daytime heat that the morning sun promised a few hours prior." If you were to "simplify" the sentence, "The late afternoon was charged with the daytime heat the morning sun promised a few hours prior." It seems less complex to read without "that" involved. It is still grammatically correct too. It's just a suggestion, I'm not forcing you to reduce "that" in every sentence. I find nothing to criticize about the characters except for the memory note/chapter/page. I was surprised, a ton of characters were introduced and it was hard for me to remember all of them. In my opinion, I think it would be better to introduce the characters during their "perfect" moment rather than making a chapter for their names, age, personality, and etc. In this way, readers won't have a hard time remembering them. Anyway, that is all. I wish the author the very best and good luck with your writing!
Well thought out novel. The synopsis got me interested, the world and characters are well written, overall a solid novel, keep up the good work!
Just finished 2 chapters for now but would definitely read the rest. This is interesting and the writing style and skill are both great. It's like I'm rreading a physical book with a fiction genre, plus history, royals and knights. Great job, author! 😁
The story so far is really well narrated and for a first time novel it's really good. I like the interactions between the characters, I also like the names and sort of setting of the kingdom. It reminds me of tribes from South America. I would like to see the paragraphs being spaced more as it felt long reading. The dialogue is a little weird at first, but I think over time I would get used to it.
I really like your novel. The way you describe the thing is really awesome. Thanks for sharing your amazing novel...... I will definitely recommend it to others 😁😁😁
Yeet!!! Sorry for the late review!!! An emergency came up, you see. Anyways, I admire your narrative style, It makes the story slow but at the same time,It describes the story with vivid imagination,very great indeed. Story development was slow at the start but started to have It's own pace, nice job!!! A very nice and interesting story, keep up the good work
The story is interesting and well described. The writing quality is also good. I like the interactions between the characters which clearly shows their good bond. So far the story is moving in well pace. Author did a great job in describing which made it easy for readers like me to understand the world background and many other things. All in all, author did a great job and keep up the good work dear author. I will definitely give 5/5 for your hardwork and to encourage you☺
Well defined scenes especially the food tasty tasty that appears in the starting chapter. Amazing world building and the stability of updating is also good. The characters are easily likable Hats off to the author for writing such a masterpiece during his first time writing a novel!
The story starts with a slow pace but afterwards it becomes really interesting. One will surely enjoy the conversation and interaction between the friends. They have a really good bonding and understanding. The characters, secenes and emotions are defined beautifully. Do give it a try you will like it....
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