Vongola The Sky King

You just made my year finally a fanfic of hitman reborn thank you so much I'm looking forward to reading it and if you ever need help I can help I read all the books and all the anime. keep up the great work.

Such A Drag, I Stand above all human clans, Bankai!!!!,  I Will Take A Bite Of This Potato Chip An Eat It, I Will Be King Of The Pirate's,  I Will Be The Hokage Believe it. Some Of My Favorite Anime Lines!!!

Rly this is too much you know the story is nothing but bulschit System skills are too easy acuried and rly........ 13j and you are dating kyoko 🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮

okay this is just ridiculous people who write reviews and don't give any constructive criticism is absolute trash that's right you are smooth brain retards that only deserve to be dog shut on the side walk, not that's over back to the real review. this story has a lot of potential i would have made a review later but due to some smooth brain "retards" who don't have anything else to do other than complain that they can't write because their trash.... aside from another of potential it has class, this is a good short read and its does need more chapters it has interesting characters they all have something going for them and this is a really good semi gender bent novel not only does the author keep most of their traits of the original characters he places a twist here and there while also making it believable that they are women. *this is literally all i can say at the moment because it needs more chapters xD looking at you author... Next is the grammar and its great not many mistakes or missed placed words or phrases an enjoyable read and that's saying a lot for this website some fictions are just unreadable. so that is literally all I have because it only has 17 chapters as of time of this review so keep up the good work author

my only problem with this novel is your writing technique(grammar, paragraph, typos). Your grammar is not that bad and the novel is still readable but i suggest you try to find an editor or smt coz it will help you a lot in this department. next. then each of your paragraph is so long, try to divide them into a more smaller one, and if your character think / saying something, try to separate them from your narrative as it will help us, reader a lot. overall i still like your premise, it's rare to find KHR fanfic so try to find an editor / try to up your skill ^^ thx and don't stop writing

Shameless author review 5 star review. And please point out some of my mistakes and please give some criticism so I can improve the errors in my novel

Finally a hitman reborn fanfic on this site you know how long I've been waiting for this.😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊I'm really enjoying the story so for I wanna see how the author deals with the other characters.

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Such A Drag, I Stand above all human clans, Bankai!!!!,  I Will Take A Bite Of This Potato Chip An Eat It, I Will Be King Of The Pirate's,  I Will Be The Hokage Believe it. Some Of My Favorite Anime Lines!!!

Such A Drag, I Stand above all human clans, Bankai!!!!,  I Will Take A Bite Of This Potato Chip An Eat It, I Will Be King Of The Pirate's,  I Will Be The Hokage Believe it. Some Of My Favorite Anime Lines!!!

Such A Drag, I Stand above all human clans, Bankai!!!!,  I Will Take A Bite Of This Potato Chip An Eat It, I Will Be King Of The Pirate's,  I Will Be The Hokage Believe it. Some Of My Favorite Anime Lines!!!

Well, is it a good work? Eh, I'm not sure. I was really in idea of reborn fanfic with harem and for the male audience. Without genderbend tsuna who goes for all boys. But that's like abrigade version of original with worse grammar. Should I commend and praise for keeping this r-15 shounen vibe of the story? I'm not sure, it's feel bland. Especially how characters interact between each other's. That's need a lot of work for sure. Either way, I'm a weird guy that actually see potential of flame powers and most weird, in gender-bend of some characters. But than we have a lot of friendship is magic bs that I highly dislike, with a lot of boys in a group that I certainly don't care in harem fanfics. And a lot of boring trainings, sure they're important for future build up. But you can watch anime and get that training don't take that much time, and most importantly, they are connected to some minor stories to keep audience interested. In the end. I willing to like the concept of work, idea behind it. But what exactly I read not inspiring and boring.

This novel is really good, but the grammar is killing my eyes. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------=======================================================+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++