Story sounds good but obviously it's just the beginning. His writing could use some work, but it sounds like it will turn out good. I can't wait to see what this young aspiring author will have for in store for us.
5 years ago
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LuisSenpai
Its an interesting story looking forward to see where it goes. You should proof read a lot more. Also hoping you can give more details of the overall world and the cities or towns in future chapters.
Story sounds good but obviously it's just the beginning. His writing could use some work, but it sounds like it will turn out good. I can't wait to see what this young aspiring author will have for in store for us.
Its an interesting story looking forward to see where it goes. You should proof read a lot more. Also hoping you can give more details of the overall world and the cities or towns in future chapters.