The story of a boy who's dream to venture into the real world is at hand, after 1,000 years when the war against the imperial tsukyomi took place in haraki, Hiro wanted to grow up and travel far and wide to make a guild for himself but as far as he and his friends go, it shall be a journey to remember or cherish

Elrika

ADVENTURE

I feel like your plot is a good concept. But there are a few things to focus on.

think of writing as painting a picture. tell me what the characters are doing as they talk. describe the expression they are showing as they speak. 

And please don't advertise on someone else's work. it's really annoying. but I wish you goodluck 😊

Nicely done start, if only you show some designs and characters of how they really look, but other then that, keep up the good work, ill support as much as possible

nicely done, your sure getting better, I liked how well you described the holy beast not to mention kiri is starting to be my favorite due to her personality trait kicking in