Ok save for some wrong grammar and a few inconsistencies
1) he should not be keeping up with shazam when he has hardly been exposed to sunlight(like how long😂😂😂it was not even a day)
Sans this its ok some inconsistencies with character development here and there
Shazam is goofy cos hes a kid but not that goofy(he tries to act like an adult when hes you know shazam just the childish tendencies show themselves once in a while)🤷🏽
Booster gold was portrayed perfectly
The other justice members, they are hardly even seen to check their development but hey its your first fanfic so🤷🏽
You did good
3 years ago
4
Leremita
good, I like it. Hopefully history will last you a long time and you will not leave it[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
3 years ago
2
DreadHead_Novelist
This is my first serio Fanfic. I’m Practicing my writing skills and learning. The grammar is alright but the story is kinda choppy. I’m not really planning anything just going with the flow and letting my imagination do everything Lol gang
Ok save for some wrong grammar and a few inconsistencies 1) he should not be keeping up with shazam when he has hardly been exposed to sunlight(like how long😂😂😂it was not even a day) Sans this its ok some inconsistencies with character development here and there Shazam is goofy cos hes a kid but not that goofy(he tries to act like an adult when hes you know shazam just the childish tendencies show themselves once in a while)🤷🏽 Booster gold was portrayed perfectly The other justice members, they are hardly even seen to check their development but hey its your first fanfic so🤷🏽 You did good
good, I like it. Hopefully history will last you a long time and you will not leave it[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
This is my first serio Fanfic. I’m Practicing my writing skills and learning. The grammar is alright but the story is kinda choppy. I’m not really planning anything just going with the flow and letting my imagination do everything Lol gang
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