pls dont give up this rewrite i just finished the other one and i hope u dont the mc personality...
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4 years ago
4
ValkyrBlack
Update stability I don’t know. 4 stars
The writing/spelling is good. 4 stars
Story is garbage.
Still don’t know what happened to his father who r*ped his mother. (And still lives with him Idk that’s what I get)
Is a slave to Hinata and Ino p*ssy.
Is not full of hate or ever took revenge even when was sold by Hokage to Kumo and when his life was basically thrown to save Hinata.
I get it for revenge in a village full of strong ninjas you have to wait but he never mentions revenge for a few chapters and acts like everything is normal.
Gives Ino and Hinata strong techniques just because and while knowing they were given to him so that he can become village slave.
Made him super strong but can’t take revenge.
Can you tell me why Hokage and Danzo not enslave him even though they know he is full of hate for them and let him get strong.
You mean to say ninjas who kill anyone who is a threat to the village let the apparent greatest threat to them and let him get strong.
I mean I hate how he acts like he wasn’t just sold and was basically killed(in a hostage situation but enemy was in genjutsu)as he had no worth and still his mentality is like how it necer happened.
4 years ago
3
Electrum_Eli
GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HIGOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)
4 years ago
2
Brandon_Newton_4299
Overall it’s good I want the Mc to not be so overpowered tho..............?......................................... ..................................
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4 years ago
0
K_M24
More dude i like it and dont drop it.
More dude i like it and dont drop it.
More dude i like it and dont drop it.
More dude i like it and dont drop it.
pls dont give up this rewrite i just finished the other one and i hope u dont the mc personality... .......................................
Update stability I don’t know. 4 stars The writing/spelling is good. 4 stars Story is garbage. Still don’t know what happened to his father who r*ped his mother. (And still lives with him Idk that’s what I get) Is a slave to Hinata and Ino p*ssy. Is not full of hate or ever took revenge even when was sold by Hokage to Kumo and when his life was basically thrown to save Hinata. I get it for revenge in a village full of strong ninjas you have to wait but he never mentions revenge for a few chapters and acts like everything is normal. Gives Ino and Hinata strong techniques just because and while knowing they were given to him so that he can become village slave. Made him super strong but can’t take revenge. Can you tell me why Hokage and Danzo not enslave him even though they know he is full of hate for them and let him get strong. You mean to say ninjas who kill anyone who is a threat to the village let the apparent greatest threat to them and let him get strong. I mean I hate how he acts like he wasn’t just sold and was basically killed(in a hostage situation but enemy was in genjutsu)as he had no worth and still his mentality is like how it necer happened.
GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HIGOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)GOOD!! BUT PLEASE KILL THE MC FATHER AND PAIR HIM WITH INO AND HINATA ( ONLY IF YOU WANT)
Overall it’s good I want the Mc to not be so overpowered tho..............?......................................... ..................................
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Wish it updated more.
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More dude i like it and dont drop it. More dude i like it and dont drop it. More dude i like it and dont drop it. More dude i like it and dont drop it.
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As long as you dont drop this one like you did with its predecessor.............................................................140 characters