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3 years ago
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mudbloodmk12
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3 years ago
27
Lutheris_right
I was actually very excited to read this book but as soon as I started reading it, I realized that maybe I was too overexcited. For a person who likes reading decent Grammar in a story, I was frustrated by just reading the first three chapters!! It makes me wonder whether English is truly been forsake because there's just too many novels here that lack of it's proper, Grammatical, way of writing.
3 years ago
27
Robert_Pippin
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3 years ago
8
Insane_Pumpkin
Good, idea, decent ploot but the grammar is tragic. If it was misspeled words or problems with he, she, it etc... then it would be ok but this fanfic here lacks entire words from the sentences...
3 years ago
7
AoMaEr
I really like your works.. first The TO/Legacies then the Lorien Legacies(I am number 4) then this Fast and Furious combine with GI Joe... You are writing fantics of all the fics, movies, shows that I like and they are good .. Hope you don't drop them and continue them.. Waiting for more chapters...
3 years ago
3
DreamerkunMK2
why is this in the popular section for fanficsi couldn't even get past the second chapter it basically rushes straight through his childhood this honestly can't be called a story
2 years ago
2
Ulan8055
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2 years ago
2
Godack
Should consider doing a rewrite of the first dozen chapters, you are spelling the words correctly but you are also forgetting to use some words at the same time. Sentences go on for a bit too long, some could use a comma and others would be better if you put a full stop there instead of a comma.
I also recommend to change your format a little bit, for example you start sentences with : 'He answered "Yes."' instead of '"Yes." He answered'.
The character himself is a bit too energetic for realism, but this story isn't really written as a what if situation and more of a this is what I think I would do in a situation.
The story itself is more original than most of the stories on this forsaken website, but the over al quality doesn't make it stick out enough. A rewrite is easy enough but because I guess English is your second+ language I can understand it being difficult.
The only problem I actually do have with this story is that I see really old comments and reviews about the grammar and it not being correct in the chapters. Doesn't give a good impression, but alas, you write for fun and practice...
3 years ago
2
Jessy_S2
well i really liked it i hope you keep updating it regularly and keep this quality to get worse well i really liked it i hope you keep updating it regularly and keep this quality to get worse [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
3 years ago
2
Patrick_hell123
I like your storytelling it's very interesting to listen to
a year ago
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LGK_maore
fantastic maaaaan
where is the moreeeeee
we need at least 100 additional chapters
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2 years ago
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Zack_Smith_9438
Ok, wow I like this story, and I like this a lot, I wish for more but you update once every couple of months!
2 years ago
1
Ozy_ox
This is a really great reincarnation story and probably the best F&F mix fan-fic out here. Would love for it to get updated!
3 years ago
1
SrLao
Calidad de la escritura 1/5
Estabilidad de las actualizaciones 3/5
Desarrollo de la historia 2/5
Diseño de personaje 2/5
Fondo mundial 2/5
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more chapters more chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chaptersmore chapters AND BEST FEMALE LEAD GISELE YASHAR
I was actually very excited to read this book but as soon as I started reading it, I realized that maybe I was too overexcited. For a person who likes reading decent Grammar in a story, I was frustrated by just reading the first three chapters!! It makes me wonder whether English is truly been forsake because there's just too many novels here that lack of it's proper, Grammatical, way of writing.
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Good, idea, decent ploot but the grammar is tragic. If it was misspeled words or problems with he, she, it etc... then it would be ok but this fanfic here lacks entire words from the sentences...
I really like your works.. first The TO/Legacies then the Lorien Legacies(I am number 4) then this Fast and Furious combine with GI Joe... You are writing fantics of all the fics, movies, shows that I like and they are good .. Hope you don't drop them and continue them.. Waiting for more chapters...
why is this in the popular section for fanficsi couldn't even get past the second chapter it basically rushes straight through his childhood this honestly can't be called a story
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Should consider doing a rewrite of the first dozen chapters, you are spelling the words correctly but you are also forgetting to use some words at the same time. Sentences go on for a bit too long, some could use a comma and others would be better if you put a full stop there instead of a comma. I also recommend to change your format a little bit, for example you start sentences with : 'He answered "Yes."' instead of '"Yes." He answered'. The character himself is a bit too energetic for realism, but this story isn't really written as a what if situation and more of a this is what I think I would do in a situation. The story itself is more original than most of the stories on this forsaken website, but the over al quality doesn't make it stick out enough. A rewrite is easy enough but because I guess English is your second+ language I can understand it being difficult. The only problem I actually do have with this story is that I see really old comments and reviews about the grammar and it not being correct in the chapters. Doesn't give a good impression, but alas, you write for fun and practice...
well i really liked it i hope you keep updating it regularly and keep this quality to get worse well i really liked it i hope you keep updating it regularly and keep this quality to get worse [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I like your storytelling it's very interesting to listen to
fantastic maaaaan where is the moreeeeee we need at least 100 additional chapters . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . .. .. . .
Ok, wow I like this story, and I like this a lot, I wish for more but you update once every couple of months!
This is a really great reincarnation story and probably the best F&F mix fan-fic out here. Would love for it to get updated!
Calidad de la escritura 1/5 Estabilidad de las actualizaciones 3/5 Desarrollo de la historia 2/5 Diseño de personaje 2/5 Fondo mundial 2/5