Egotistic main character meets a girl who will change his life completely. How will he save the world from it's timed destruction?
Follow Leon Czhainnehart in his journey to return to the normal lifestyle he wished for. Will he save humanity? Or leave it to it's untimely demise?
Series on pause due to personal reasons. Will probably start updating by February. See ya!
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I will start from the beginning :) The cover page is original. The title... in general I don't like most of the titles on Webnovel, but I know that the app prevents you from adding titles that already exist, etc. so can be problematic to find it title, that will relevant to the content. Yours is intriguing. The storyline is interesting and characters expressive. You're doing well! Happy New Year!
All right, new novel over here. We got some good writing and an potentially interesting storyline going on. Of course at the moment we are on the road getting to the more interesting and maybe epic bits of the story. It's safe to say that this story is currently building up the upcoming events, which hopefully will arrive in future chapters. If there's any criticism I have for this story, author, is that there are many paragraphs that are massive. By that I mean the paragraphs are too big. I was commented the similar thing by some of my readers, and I had to put more spaces on my novel's paragraphs. I suggest you do the same thing because your readers read your novel on mobile. In addition, some parts of the novel are better off shown than told. For example, the behavior and personality of some characters. Keep in mind, telling is fine so it gets out to the reader quicker, but say for instance your character is angry, don't just say "he was angry", try "he slammed his hand onto the table." to show that the character is angry, to the point where the reader can really imagine the scenario. All in all however, I recommend readers to give this a shot.
Well, what do I say? I am not really a fan of fantasy genre but the reason I checked this book out was because of the name, it really got my eyes, author!!! The words, the description, the characters are all balanced in a very good way in each and every single chapter. Please update more often and don't give up on this book!! I love it!!!!
I must say that I like the way the author knows his way around words and sentences. The characters are very well described and the plot sure has picked my attention. Keep up with the good work dear author!
Wow, 👏🏻 I'm giving it a five star review. because this story hits the spot! And one thing about this work is while I am reading it, I can clearly picture out the terrain and the emotion of the character. You don't just tell a story author, you show it to your readers. 👏🏻👍🏻
Hii, so I read your story. Some of the wordings can be changed to improve the flow of the sentences. I also struggled with the synopsis at the start. I think you can make it more interesting. It just sounds a bit cliche. But the plot is cool. I like how you started with a flashback. I am excited to see what you have more for the readers!
Dropping my review here. I must say I'm hook with your story. The characters were very life-like. It also has an intriguing storyline. Keep up the good work
I must say you know your way around words. It has little to not grammatical errors. The plot is quite fresh aswell. It already had me hooked from the first chapter. I love novels that describe every detail of some horrible incident that has happened. I love the main character as well. Different from most skirt chasing characters. Quite well done and I hope to see more in the future:)
I love how you portray your characters here author. You describe them well and gave life to their personalities. Especially your main character, I can see the story world from his perspective. And that's a plus. But if I may add, I would like to suggest that you'll be careful with your choice of words. I don't mean it as a bad thing though, it's just that the thoughts are enumerated differently in each sentence. Giving description each may mislead your readers from understanding the main point of your story. But overall, you did a splendid job portraying them. I find that totally likeable. And would absolutely suggest this story to all readers. Great job there author. Keep up the good work!
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I must say you have a good story here and I like the main characters very much. They are very lifelike and the thought process of the characters are well explained.
Really smooth start to a webnovel here. GrotesqueIce writes in a very easy-to-digest style that I found almost conversational, like a friend telling a story around a campfire. Leon makes for an interesting protagonist, having witnessed tragedy at such a young age, and I appreciated to quieter moments we get to spend with him to establish his character. The pace picks up after the first few chapters and I see a real quality story developing here. Great stuff so far.
surprisingly, I feel Leon's personality and thoughts relatable, and I think you developed him very well! some errors here and there, but the descriptions and character development were on point, and I'm looking forward to your future updates!
Wow. The writing is so intricate and well done! I love how the emotions and feelings or thoughts are very well written and mature. A small suggestion would be to break up the long paragraphs into smaller ones so the reader can gobble it up faster and it's somehow easier to follow when it's broken up.. But the story Is amazing and has great potential. Leon is a capturing main character and I can see you will do good things with this book! Well done and Good luck author!
I love where this is going, so is Stella some sort of angel or something? Well, I love the MC, he's a well rounded character. The author is doing a great job with this story.