The Lawes Girl

A very nice story! I really enjoyed reading the first few parts of the story! I would recommend adding more tags and an elaborate synposis to hook the readers upon seeing this novel the first time! in that way, readers would flock to this story in no time! I left things that I think needs editting in the comment section. Feel free to disagree! Kudos for the author!

The nice opening, i already read chapter one. This story very interesting, as your another story. I enjoy read this, really [img=recommend][img=recommend] Please give review to Lucia vs Diana too, i also add to my library.

Man, I just can't help but love long chapters. AND the characters are fleshed out really well too. That's why this piece of gem needs more readers. Webnovel should do somethinh about this to place it into the limelight!

Lucille Lawes lives an independent life while also being close to her loving family and friends. After a toneless gala with her wealthy parents, she accepts a job offer and meets Nick Atkins. (It was not an instant attraction.) Rude and impassive Nick sees Lucille for the second time and thinks, “Trouble”. Thinking she would be that for him when in fact it was the exact opposite And Lucille will does not tolerate trouble. Please ignore the long paragraphs and enjoy this tale of “trouble”, love and forgiveness.

Overall it's a catching story with great character personalities. I really like how Lucille's personality is. The plot looks interesting too. I hope you keep it up, Author!

Nice story but a little bit short. Still it was interesting to read.... U did a good job author... But also one thing if author has given the chapters a proper name then the readers gonna find it more interesting... So plzzz do care for that author.... But moreover it was really good time to pass for me.....

Will admit I was a little confused at the first beginning, but the more I started to read, the more I got a clear handle on things. I do see room for improvement and can tell you put forth a lot of love into your work! Hope you keep writing and doing what you love the most! You got this and good luck!

A powerful start with great image created. The plot grows so well throughout the chapters while the picture becomes clearer through those words written. Overall a great read

Honestly, this book is sooooo good.. Like, author you did great in pulling me into your story.. I'm just sad it's ended already. But listen up readers, pick up this book and you WILL NOT REGRET IT other than having to finish it too soon☺😍😍[img=recommend][img=recommend]

What a fantastic story! You won't regret reading this story guys... I just highly recommend this to all the readers out there.....❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

Here are my honest thought based on what I read so far and sorry for the long time to review because of real life problem, World Background: The world building in this one is mostly okay in my opinion and I do like how the author describe the world which is quite detail and most of it fine. However, I think the author should give a clearer direction for the world itself to make it more interesting Characters: Lucile so far its okay and the other cast is also fine in my opinion. However, I do suggest the author to make them more flesh out and added a voice tone to make the conversation have more emotion in my opinion. Overall, its a nice book and I do suggest the author to split up the long paragraph into two or three. Keep up the good work and good luck

A brief warning beforehand: I have been quite honest in this review. This comes forth from the believe that you will benefit more from my honesty than from my tendency to sing you praise. So firstly: You present your reader with a popular and promising premise that is well executed. I am not, however, very compelled to keep reading. I believe this because there is an absence of rhythm in your writing. Which causes it to become tedious. Allow me to give you an example: I am a normal sentence. I consist if five words. Look here is another one. This is becoming quite boring. There is no rhythm present. Instead: Instead, try to give your readers sentences with rhythm. Offer them sentences as if you have composed them the same way you would music. Real music. Give them the beating of drums and the sounds of trumpets. Give them rhythm and sound. And then, when you think you have their attention, give them a sentence so long and tedious that you struggle to keep their attention, until you are convinced they have given up until you say, look: it is worth reading. I sincerely hope this absurd example has portrayed my feelings correctly. Secondly, your characters (apart from your main character) tend to feel quite two-dimensional. Which wouldn’t be weird on short-term, but I feel that we spend enough time with them in order for them to develop more immersive character. And I miss that in your work. I know what they look like. I know what their basic characteristics are, but, they don’t feel fleshed out… as your reader, I need more. Give me more texture. Your characters are lively but there is not much dept. I need more information in order for them to feel like actual people. Not necessarily about how they look, but rather how they move. How they feel. Is there a certain charm or abruptness to the way they move? Do their smiles reach their eyes? Do they move their hands while talking? Don’t misunderstand me, this is present in your work. But not enough for your characters to feel real just yet. (Naturally this is very hard to do. I certainly don’t claim to be able to do this perfectly). I do applaud the clear enthusiasm you put into your work and wish you a lot of fun continuing to write your story.

I love the narrative style of this story. It felt as though I was going on the journey with the characters. This kept me glued to my screen for some time.

Love the sophistication in your writing! It flows naturally like fish in the water, and I am really looking forward to seeing your upcoming chapters!