I like the story people always choose Rosalie for mate and personally I’m with the Alice sect. Im also a Captain for the non-harem alliance.
4 years ago
115
PsyLoRD
And here we go again... another novel in twilight, with great potential but that will totally get dropped (again)
4 years ago
71
BnC_Ronin
I haven't even read the first chapter yet but I'm putting a 5 star review in just because I found out you're a man of culture because you said no harem.
4 years ago
30
LaurentCross
Alice is amazing but it isn’t enough to keep me interested .
1. plot is underdeveloped and rushed
2.mc is bland also very poorly written
3. very little world building and background
4.very unoriginal plot feels like every other twilight fic mashed together.
5.mc’s family is better written and more interesting than your main character
6.grammar needs work it’s not terrible but it needs to be fixed .
positives below ⬇️
1.Stable updates
2.Alice is the love interest
3.Grammar isn’t terrible
4 years ago
24
Darius_Chromwell
while I like to see a twilight fanfic and the pairing is a nice choice the romance is way to fast and nowhere in the MC's wishes did he become a werewolf yet all of a sudden he cant control his primal instincts. sorry but no.
4 years ago
16
UhVise_Necro
Love the story and i agree alice is best girl
4 years ago
8
littlefrench
I can’t even go through the first chapter, the grammar is outright terrible
It’s so beyond me to see readers giving so many stars to this...
4 years ago
7
kiddeath1998
Alice's is best girl and this gets better and better the more I read it. still there are slip-ups here and there, but overall it's a good story that deserves some of your time if you're a fan of the series.
4 years ago
5
JT_boss
this is a realy good fanfic i hope u keep on writing it 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄
4 years ago
5
Kutay1661
sigh* i hope you dont drop this like every twilight fanfic because this is really good
I find it a real pity the storry with a mc who chooses Alice is something I have been looking for a long time, unfortunately plot is underdeveloped and rushed, your MC is boring and also very badly written
there is very little
world building and background,
the family of your mc is better written and more interesting than your own mc why ?
Your MC fills up like a cardboard character
it doesn't really feel alive but more like something that is just there, I recommend you to read this
I Reincarnated In Twilight is not perfect either but it shows well how to do it.
This is not meant as an insult, it is just my opinion, and everyone has their own opinion, the story has real potential I would like to see a rewrite to evaluate it better ,
Incoherent mess of contradictions. This story is random set of events with little to no structure. The poeple written are poorly flushed up and often have little to no consistency. The parts of the story that are coherent only come from the original movie or books. Do not recommend
2 years ago
2
BAD_MAN
Alice BESTO GURL[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I like the story people always choose Rosalie for mate and personally I’m with the Alice sect. Im also a Captain for the non-harem alliance.
And here we go again... another novel in twilight, with great potential but that will totally get dropped (again)
I haven't even read the first chapter yet but I'm putting a 5 star review in just because I found out you're a man of culture because you said no harem.
Alice is amazing but it isn’t enough to keep me interested . 1. plot is underdeveloped and rushed 2.mc is bland also very poorly written 3. very little world building and background 4.very unoriginal plot feels like every other twilight fic mashed together. 5.mc’s family is better written and more interesting than your main character 6.grammar needs work it’s not terrible but it needs to be fixed . positives below ⬇️ 1.Stable updates 2.Alice is the love interest 3.Grammar isn’t terrible
while I like to see a twilight fanfic and the pairing is a nice choice the romance is way to fast and nowhere in the MC's wishes did he become a werewolf yet all of a sudden he cant control his primal instincts. sorry but no.
Love the story and i agree alice is best girl
I can’t even go through the first chapter, the grammar is outright terrible It’s so beyond me to see readers giving so many stars to this...
Alice's is best girl and this gets better and better the more I read it. still there are slip-ups here and there, but overall it's a good story that deserves some of your time if you're a fan of the series.
this is a realy good fanfic i hope u keep on writing it 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄
sigh* i hope you dont drop this like every twilight fanfic because this is really good
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I find it a real pity the storry with a mc who chooses Alice is something I have been looking for a long time, unfortunately plot is underdeveloped and rushed, your MC is boring and also very badly written there is very little world building and background, the family of your mc is better written and more interesting than your own mc why ? Your MC fills up like a cardboard character it doesn't really feel alive but more like something that is just there, I recommend you to read this I Reincarnated In Twilight is not perfect either but it shows well how to do it. This is not meant as an insult, it is just my opinion, and everyone has their own opinion, the story has real potential I would like to see a rewrite to evaluate it better ,
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Incoherent mess of contradictions. This story is random set of events with little to no structure. The poeple written are poorly flushed up and often have little to no consistency. The parts of the story that are coherent only come from the original movie or books. Do not recommend
Alice BESTO GURL[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]