Danmachi: My adventure

Alright, so I get the gist of the story so far but the English sentences are all incomplete sentences and comes off very bland. I would work on sentence structure a bit even a run on would be better it is very mechanical to read and will be hard to gain much interest as is.

The novel's progression is extremely fast with no backfill on information with prior events, there's also the issue with P.O.V you don't really know who is speaking, the MC, or one of the characters you can't tell.