Emperor's descendant system
"Emperors have been in this world for decades. Some have the ambition to conquer, and some to expand their economy. In both circumstances, their abilities are limitless. They are all-powerful, and no person on the planet can stand in their way (except all mighty God himself). Legend has it that one person will mount 10,000 men to stop the emperor's tyranny. Humans are still waiting for this prophesy to come true, hoping that someone would save them from the dictatorship of the emperors warring over who would become dominant."
"Little did the emperors know that Armdal's descendant has already been chosen since the beginning."
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You might be asking yourself what happened to the power of a God, well due to religious reasons, I couldn't continue writing about Gods I do not worship. What I was doing was blasphemy. So enjoy this revamp of the story
I really love the play style as well as the plot of the story. The way things are going, I bet this novel with become one of the best if you try to improve your writing skills
The story's start was a boom. Great job at characterization. Do clear your grammatical mistakes though. Even though it's just the start of the book I can tell it will reach great heights.Keep going! All the best!
Very nice brother. You are a very good person. You have seen through the truth I am trying to show you all unlike those stubborn trolls. People like you are one of the reason I dont give up no matter how much disadvantage I am at. May Allah make your story famous and prosperous. Ameen.
Yo, I am back, I finished last Monday, so I can assure you, I won't do 10 days without releasing a single chapter. Content every single day
So far there is just one problem, you did not give the power levels of the gods. I would really like to know who is the most powerful god out of all of them
I will give it 5 stars because I loved the world you created in these few chapters, the plot is smooth as a sea wave, there are a few mistakes here and there, but other than that it is worthy of the 5 stars.
Great display of world building skills! There were a few grammatical errors here and there, but not enough to make the novel an unenjoyable reading experience. The characters are lovable, and full of personality, and you can tell that the author's put a lot of thought into the creation of this novel.
Nice play dude. I love the fact you are transforming your novel into a play. The plot and background of the story is really good. It is like you are trying to have a good vision of the next chapters already
I never thought you were serious about writing a book, but you are doing great. But I think you can do better. The book still has alot of improvement to do.
Hey dude. I never knew you could write such interesting books. Are there other things you are hiding from me. You just gotta improve you writing quality though. You stil did make a great book Aarhus. I think I might use this website frequently now
Man, concept, and progression are good, you have to work on your writing. Try to make characters more interactive, Anyways it's the starting of the series, Waiting for some good updates.
Interesting premise with a developing story that flows rather well. What I find most interesting is the unique writting style, it feels almost like we're reading a script for a movie or a play. With the interesting contrast with what I would assume a very greek or roman mythology inspired settin, I quite like it! The language needs a bit of improvement but otherwise very good. An interesting story so far, I look forward to the continuation!
Well done backstory that gives us a clear vision about the world and what to come. If there was anything to fix, maybe it's only the dialogue since the rest is actually fine. Keep up the work and good luck! [img=recommend]
Hello Yonko, It is Illona Sama. Love your book. Big efforts. You need to get Grammarly for your mistakes correction or some other application. The question you definitely have to answer me: Where did you get that photo?
There would be a lot of familiar names as the story includes all Gods of different origin and characters of different legend. With that being said, these characters are immediately introduced early in the story which turns to a humble and harsh life of our protagonist to battle among powers in a glimpse almost like a snap. But I'll like how the author made this the beginning of the story rather than treading the plot slowly. Another thing to point out is the unique way of the author in writing dialogue. Some will find it weird at first because the author describe almost every action in a conversation. But when one gets used to it, they'll enjoy it. So overall it was an exciting read that still has a lot of mysteries waiting for the future to be explained.