The dragon ball universe alternate.

What do you think about the story? Do you have any ideas on how to improve the story comment to let me know😀😀😀.................Please support me.

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hello I have a question I have written a story and I see many people cant give me any power stones do you know why??? and the story is goooooooood.

Well it is nice waiting for the next chapter can improve vocabulary and separate into more paragraphs but overall I will give around 3 or 4 star.

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This book is unfortunately unoriginal and rushed. The author changes nothing at first and the feeling I get when reading this is that they don't care about the story. It has potential to be a great story but falls flat. My advice to the author is flesh it out a bit more even if you don't want to change the main storyline much, add in a system that penalizes MC for deviation through weakening. Also that rewards MC for sticking to plot. The first 5 chapters should be at least 12 instead.

Omg!! Horrible writing!! Idea Is good but writing is all over the place. hard to understand. need to Edit, rewite, re-read, edit again before reupload man. this is like a 3rd graders writing.

The plot and everything is good but it is super super confusing like to the point were you have no clue to what is happening in some parts and he randomly says somthing and it is like he changes his mind and goes off to say something completely different than what was first said

Hi! This is Ada, an editor of the international Suspense/Thriller Writing Contest I. I see great potential in your book, but your book is so underrated here. Thus, I invited you to join the contest a week ago. Please reply to me. Let’s discuss in detail.