Fallen Angel.
Najin, an ordinary boy who had lived eons of years ago, lost his beloved and at the same time the Earth lost its people, after a tragic incident that completely wiped out the Earth's Layer.
Until the confrontation with the higher beings, everything was peaceful as always. Well, at least until the gods destroyed the so-called eternal peace by starting the holy war, a war that changed everything. They were afraid. Afraid of the prophecy, "La Opresora de La Vida", a being from ancient legends that does not belong to this world. To keep track of this prophecy, the gods created four archangels who were forced to work together in the creation of the earth.
„….“
„But where is the punishment for evil?“
„Why are the gods, in which you believe allowed to sin?“
„Why should I give up my revenge? On behalf of what? And what of the higher order of things, in which evil deeds are not punished?
„So I ask, where is punishment for evil? Who has it and grants access?“
ngl its great to read ,i recommend it to everyone!!! the story,the character ,the building up, this is getting so good in the future. has potential for my fav new gen ngl
Okay so.. this novel is starting off great but there are some problems which i personally think you should fix 1st - the writing quality. dont get me wrong here, it is average or even above on this app but the dialogues are like they lack the “humanism”. when there is a dialogue, it feels like programmed robots talking. try to add more dots, !, ? and other things that would make the writing quality more readable and more comfortable to read 2nd - there are too little details - for an example, i totally have no ideo how the characters look, while some people like little details, you should still atleast try to explain how the main cast looks 3rd - fast pacing - again, some people will like this, some will not but the story we have now, feels a little too fast for me otherwise, this is a good novel that you can probably expect good things from in the future (i hope), so as of now, i reccomend it to read this, because the story is interesting enough and good luck to the author with this project[img=recommend]
this is different from what you originally wrote but i like it ngl. has more characters than the initial version and they're pretty charming. and the world feels like it's gonna have alot of depth
I kinda love it ngl, but work on your grammar, and try to make it longer. And use "! | ?", we don’t wanna see robots!!! but yea 6.5-7/10. ALSOO describe the character.