Chaos' Heir

Hello, author here. Thank you for having given my second novel a chance. I plan to update two chapters every day. Moreover, I always read the comments, so I will fix every error that you point out in less than a day. Anyway, I hope you enjoy the story.

Preliminary 5 star review as I am a big fan of his other work Birth of the Demonic Sword. Will update review at 50+ chap . . . . . . . . . ..

Disclaimer: I have enjoyed this story and like the premise but this is a complaining review. I still highly recommend giving this a try. These are just the problems I think exist and they haven't stopped me from continuing to read this. As I read this I come across a few critiques/personal opinions. 1. The human race is said to be spaceworthy and traveling to other planets, conquering or making alliances with other races. Yet throughout the story the scale never really feels like that is the case. It consistently feels like the only people in existence are the characters introduced 'on screen'. Ex. He is on a world where the race is said to have been in control of the entire planet and yet I never felt like there were more than a few dozen people living there. Most of the story takes place in training camps that barely seem to have any people. 2. His relationship with the alien woman, Liiza, has come to dominate at least half of the story and is tiring at this point to read about. It was interesting at first but now it is just repetitive. The story stopped being about the MC getting stronger and traveling the universe to find his enemy and now it's all about how he will do anything for his relationship. The relationship that multiple times in the story has been said to be 'toxic'. 3. I've noticed this in many stories. When an author wants to make his MC seem smarter or better they will make their superiors dumber or incompetent to lend credence to the MC. This happens here with the MC's military command. Someone in command should not be so flustered or easily persuaded by a teenage boy. Even if the said teenage boy has 'magical alien trauma' giving him OP powers and plot armor.

Omg a new novel from him i haven t even read a chapter and i still know its gonna be a great novel. well points it is i guess ..............

A better novel than most on this site but still gravely lacking: 1) Story proceeds at a snail pace, there are so many filler chapters (with the main character reaching the first level of cultivation at chapter 190) 2) The main character becomes progressively unlikeable (starts betraying his own race because he loves an alien girl) 3) Half the chapters are romance, I did not come here to read a romance story. 4) Cultivation levels are clear but applications of mana are confusing, there is new entire systems of utilisation getting thrown to the reader at random with massive info dumps and repetitions. Grammar is good but the story is so slow I can't recommend this to anyone. From chapter 100 to 200 there has barely been any development.

From my expierence on this website I have read many of good books. But honestly none of them even come close to the quality that is shown from this one. I cant help but feel refreshed when reading this book, not because I enjoy the main characters pain but because his pain is actually relatable. He doesnt only get physically hurt like most main characters but he also gets mentally hurt. His struggles are not only large monsters that want to smash him to a pulp but also his struggle to understand himself and what he feels during his journey. Never have I read such a good book on this website and I honestly doubt anything will come close for quite awhile. Bravo and keep up the great work Mr. Author.

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Review by chapter 269 I binged the story in the past few days. I decided to take a break before continuing the journey. I wish to write honest feedback before any recollection gets muddled. I am a very picky reader so I may be biased. I will go through my thoughts relative to other works expected from webnovel. The author is passionate in what he does. He pushed himself everyday and relys on the readers for motivation. It is evident in his recent work that kept me reading unlike his previous work. For reasons I can't recall, I couldn't get past it's single digits. I'll be following his projects in the future the will surely be better. Anyways, let get back to the subject. The story is nothing special. A work one who enjoys the classic solo edgy beat em up would enjoy. There are certain aspects that makes it preferable compared to the rest. There is no mention of systems and 'skills/magics' are not explored anatomically. This allows for more focus on the story that many novels fail to understand. Characters are explored in more detail, monologues are more prevalent, everything one expects from a webnovel is there and more. But that's where it ends. The core of the story is set in flaws just like every other novel. The Mc has a questionable incentive, the world is nothing special/ doubtful perhaps and most character have a pretense of third dimensionality Going into slight detail, the Mc's motivation mostly arises from a reoccurring nightmare. Personal ideologies push the Mc in pursuit of power. I prefer them to be more tangible/physical. It gives more substance to motivation compared to a drive derived from an unrealistic unbreakable will. The Mc is perceived with a lot of flaws, the core of what makes characters alive. When the flaws are put to the test however, they never falter. It annoys me when it occurs in the story. Show me some weakness, sacrifice the mc's objective success and potential, loss friends, family because of these weaknesses. These weaknesses are bottled up and rationally explored for growth instead of exploding unfavorably for a more organic story. The Mc is a Mary Sue when it matters. The world revolves around the Mc. No single action from characters can alter the perceived story like the Mc. For this reason and many minor others, characters don't feel alive and relevant even though some are explored in detail. Any given character has to be written like a Mc. That is what makes the world vivid and lively. Perhaps George is a fair character but the author Insistance on the Mc's solo action doesn't give him a chance to shine. The Mc meets love interests at the beginning of each planet. The Mc relys on them for growth. I like reliance but they don't necessarily need to be love interests. It gets tiring. For reasons mentioned above, the world inst exciting beyond the expected big bad needs to die. One example, the juxtaposition of Mcs enrollment in a military and his continued defiance of orders and relished freedom bothers me. Whether the military has reasons for them or not, it goes against the perceived realism associated to these associations. Many more occur in the story making it wacky. It's a good read. Nothing exciting I would say.

EveofChaos is proving that he is a writing machine. Writing two book, totalling 5chapters a day between the two, is outstanding. Well done Eve! Keep it up. Chaos’Heir is a scifi with more fictional elements at the moment. Character development is going smoothly and tension is building in the story. If you are looking for a new book to read I recommend picking up this one. Don’t mind the cliffhangers, they just build your addiction.

A million girlfriends, new one every 3-6 months - Its the most annoying thing in this novel, ruining story for me. Does mc have nothing better to do? His loyalty is non existent, its a miracle he is still loyal to humanity and not a retard traitor like mc in Avatar or smth.

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started for the action, quit from the sudden romance that started enveloping the story

Starts interesting enough with the first 100 or so chapters being the story of a young boy that goes to a military academy and is on his way to becoming a soldier. Then makes an abrupt turn and spends the next 100 or so chapters focusing on passionate young love that prevails against all challenges. They know each-other only two weeks before their love reaches an unshakeable level, more passionate, true and free and hones than any love that's ever loved. Oh, and the MC is a martial genius, prodigy and the one to always save the day with everyone else just a pale shadow of his magnificence. Well, its not quite as bad as that but you get the idea. Most annoying is how the story turned from being a soft military fantasy to being a romantic fantasy. Its not badly written, but its also not what I started reading.