In MHA as Rimuru Tempest with Archer Emiya's Power

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The style of writing is weird, I don't know if you have read any other novels before but it feels weird for you not to use ' ' for thinking and " " for talking. Instead of using " " for both. Also putting the names in front of what people are saying throws off immersion you should do, "Wait did that actually happen to him?" Bobby asked john with genuine curiosity.

I dont know what to write so I'll just say keep up the great work and the story is great so far. Also I have a question will he be later on getting more of rimuru stuff or abilities from the anime or LN/WN

While the story has a nice premise and starting plot the mc feels like too much of a pushover I don't mind him being a trap but the way anyone can trick him or treat him as a pushover repulses me. He just goes along with whatever happens,when nezu tricked him even with the contract he could've just denied anything and refuse to a contract he just took nezu questioning him repeatedly, but that's fine even if he went with it. But him being declared as the loser of the cooking competitive absolutely discouraged me from reading. That was so heavily biased and the fact that he goes along with the bets with him gaining bs in return even if he wins yea no sorry byee!!

author I recommend a small harem maximum three because with a large one the stories are ruined it would rise to a higher ranking if the story improves but at the moment there are few chapters but for a novice writer in my opinion he is doing quite well

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dude you need to read it yourself and then correct the story. the way it is going is completely uninteresting. even the conversation need improvement.

This is better on Wattpad. ¯⁠\⁠_⁠ಠ⁠_⁠ಠ⁠_⁠/⁠¯

Your MC is honestly just plain too edgy. All the killing and castrations, you honestly need to chill out my dude. Your story would be 10x better if your Mc just calmed down a bit.

I won't say anything, I'll just leave this here and go, good luck with your story................................. ........................................

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Secarah keseluruan tidak masuk akal dan bodoh dia dari dunia modern tapi akal sehat karakter utama mc china yang berarti menyinggung dia lo akan dibunuh atau gimanah ya dia menyelesaikan kebanyakan masalah dengan membunuh yang sangat tidak cocok dengan tema dunia boku no hero

MC get Op at the start. didn't end the First world and already has the Power to destroy a Planet. get abilities that he use a couple of Times. nothing original. 28 ch. read

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