[REWRITE IS UP] The Dragonborn Comes: A Self Insert

I can understand the MC, he is insecure, generally looks like an indecisive amoeba than a man, I would say, an eternally depressed whiner. However, he was born in this world as Dovahkiin, this must mean something. Dovahkiin is a legendary person, decisive, strong-willed, and there is nothing here that would remind me of a dragonborn

Reveal Spoiler

Here is the doom-driven review. The Elder Scrolls told of their return. Their defeat was merely delay, until the time after Oblivion opened, When the sons of Skyrim would spill their own blood. But no-one wanted to believe – believe they even existed...And when the truth finally downs, it downs with FIRE. Wabbajack!

Bad. Forced drama. Author cant express what the character's emotion, I cant connect to the characters especially the mc. Just read it guys, tell me if im wrong.

Dovahkiin, Dovahkiin Naal ok zin los vahriin Wah dein vokul mahfaeraak ahst vaal! Ahrk fin norok paal graan Fod nust hon zindro zaan Dovahkiin, fah hin kogaan mu draal! Huzrah nu, kul do od, wah aan bok lingrah vod Ahrk fin tey, boziik fun, do fin gein! Wo lost fron wah ney dov Ahrk fin reyliik do jul Voth aan suleyk wah ronit faal krein Ahrk fin kel lost prodah, Do ved viing ko fin krah, Tol fod zeymah win kein meyz fundein! Alduin, feyn do jun, Kruziik vokun staadnau, Voth aan bahlok wah diivon fin lein! Nuz aan sul, fent alok, Fod fin vul dovah nok, Fen kos nahlot mahfaeraak ahrk ruz! Paaz Keizaal fen kos stin nol bein Alduin jot! Dovahkiin, Dovahkiin Naal ok zin los vahriin Wah dein vokul mahfaeraak ahst vaal! Ahrk fin norok paal graan Fod nust hon zindro zaan Dovahkiin, fah hin kogaan mu draal!

The story has a lot of potential and a very good start. I'm looking forward for the next chapters and will be putting this story in my library.

Very solid starting and the writing quality is impressive, the events managed to pull me in and keep me entertained without distracting me from the main character

Solid premise, Solid Writing. Story has *alot* of potential for development. It would be interesting to see how a Dragonborne adapts to a more modern magical time, than his own. I am looking forward to see where this goes. Good luck!

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