The writing quality puts me off a bit, since its in paragraph form.
The development of the story is quite fast, there wasn't much attention towards world building which I would advice author to do. The designing of character is quite simple which is fine. Overall the author could work a bit more towards development of mc and the story as whole.
The writing quality puts me off a bit, since its in paragraph form. The development of the story is quite fast, there wasn't much attention towards world building which I would advice author to do. The designing of character is quite simple which is fine. Overall the author could work a bit more towards development of mc and the story as whole.