Banishment

Excellent story! The novel has a lot of potential and while the chapters are a bit long, the author keeps the readers engaged the entire time. I absolutely love the poetic elements in the story, unlike many novels I've read, it didn't seem forced and it didn't overpopulate the story. Grammar and the flow of the story was absolutely perfect, literally nothing to complain about with this wonderful piece of work. 😌

It's honestly sad to see such a good novel which such little appreciation while there are other novels with terrible grammer and spelling gaining an unimaginable amount of attention. It's not an overstatement when I say this novel has one of the best narrations I've ever seem. Furthermore, I have to admit I love the world building which is constructed so well. I honestly hope that more people come across this hidden gem.

I'd like to acknowledge the author's bold and beautiful writing style, it made it really easy to understand the main character's inner monologues and connect certain dots mentioned later. The character design is another thing I'd like to mention, it's well grafted with the flaws and insecurities of regular people. The story itself is a gem as it stepped away from environments that we were too familiar with like royal family, CEO/office romance, school and one night stand/running off while pregnant/baby. It was nice reading and still falling in love with the characters in a completely different setting. I appreciate new tropes very much and I hope more WN authors try it too. keep it up, author

I'm excessively amazed by the creativity of the author. Dehni has literally illustrated new terms for various. Why did I say illustration? Because the way they were described gave me a whole visual inside my brain. Velori's story also has blend of mystery, adventure and even sadness. You can have a taste of everything at once. Just only thing I was confused in the beginning was the relationship between characters. And the description could be a little lesser about the venue should work. But that's just my advice as I was reading more about the venue and decoration than the characters it felt sometimes.😅😅 Overall, a really great book I came accross. Keep up the great work and recommended to everyone!!

Nice story and keeps the reader hooked up. What I found most admirable is the world background. Very well explained and easy to understand . Nice work Author👍👍😻

Starting off with what I liked, I did enjoy the concept of the Originators being somewhat sentient elements that requires their approval to use their power. That was pretty neat. Though I thought it would be used in a more offensive sense. Anyhow, onward with the review. Writing Quality: For most of the novel, the quality was smooth and crisp. But the repeated words really knocked it down. Which sucks because this section would've gotten 5 stars if it wasn't for that. Allow me to showcase some examples. -Her glare only deepened. -and the sudden wink brightened the glare... (Chapter 1) In one paragraph, smile, smiled, and smile again are used. And in the following paragraph, it's used again. In chapter three, a man is described as beautiful again shortly after the first time. "She wasn't my birth mother. My birth mother-" The second use of birth mother can easily be avoided. (Chapter 6) The phrase "her chest was pounding" is used again a few paragraphs later in chapter 7. -Her one-sided conversation with a frustrated huff of air. Why she was so frustrated with him (Chapter 7) Now this wasn't so bad, until the later chapters. Let's see her, I'll just pick a random chapter, ah 21 will do. The phrase "stormed off" gets used multiple times. Irritation is used three times. In chapter 23, fear gets used 4 times in one paragraph. Four...times. I think that alone showcases the problem with repeating phrases and words. And in the 3rd paragraph of that same chapter, sudden and anger are used again. Wanna know what else is used again? Fear. Now I could go on, but I think the point is clear. Besides using a thesaurus, describing the emotions can help cut down on the repetition. Stability of Updates: So for this category, I don't worry about when the chapters were released. I focus on the consistency of the chapters. And your chapters were very consistent. Good job :> Story Development: Alright, so the story laid pretty well. I enjoyed reading through it, though I'm going to lay out so issues I had or things I didn't generally like. Firstly, I'm not a big fan of suddenly dropping a dead family member in media, of anyone really. It makes me feel "oh that sucks" because it's just so sudden. Especially since this is the first chapter and I already know her dad is dead. And the way she's affected is told by words, rather than seeing how it affects her today. And the same thing is done with her mom, except at least there's a description of how it still affects her today in chapter three. It's like I feel "oh that's sad", rather than "oh that's sad!" That's just me though. I would love to the other elements have their time in the spotlight, Illusion was the one we say the most, and I would love to have their story expanded. The Originators are a pretty interesting concept, though they didn't make a huge impact until later in the story, like chapter 12. This is a bit odd as they are mentioned in the beginning of chapter one, and it takes a while before the reader can actually learn about them. So a bit of pacing issue there, but explaining a little bit through dialogue is completely fine. The same is done for the Realms, also mentioned in the beginning of the story. There's such little information on the Realms which hasn't became a relevant topic in the story at all. Now we already spoke about this, so I'll leave it at that. Lastly, seeing how important her Ben and Anne are to her, it'd be nice to see them again in the story. Especially since it's been some time since we've seen them. I'm leaning more towards Anne as I feel she has a much personal connection to her rather than a "lover" like Ben. Character Design: What can I say, characters are described well. Their descriptions are so vivid that I'd get canceled if I tried doing it with a female character. Although, their clothing isn't described in a similar quality, unless there is a lack of clothing like swimsuits. Which is pretty funny to me. Breasts, buttocks, and the like are described to detail but not clothing. No amount of butt flaps and or the jeans around Ben's butt could save ya, even though it is tempting. World Background: Environments are described very well, and so are objects. So detailed that it's easy to paint a picture of the scenery you're trying to set. Now if the character designs got this much attention to detail, you'd be golden. With that taken care of, I can definitely say this is a pretty good read, just fix up in the areas I suggested and let the readers view top tier smut. Intrigued to know how the story continues, and if Velori can gain the trust of all the Originators. Now then, tell Hale to get shirtless for me, don't ask.

The start alone got me deep into the book. I totally Loved it ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️👈❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️.. Please update more

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Well, first of all, I'm glad I stepped by! Your story is very intriguing, and since it's so well written, it's even better! I liked a lot your description of places, people, and even actions. I must congratulate your work, because I think you've put a lot of effort with the world building and the character creation! Seriously, great job!

The story is good and the plot is also good, also a great book Complete at this creativity.. A wonderful book worth reading ...............

Love your synopsis, in fact I love about everything about the book.... The grammar and everything is just perfect, no error seem in the chapters I have read so fat

The writing is absolutely flawless. I enjoyed this book and I have no qualms with it. It's almost too good to be on Webnovel. Good job author

I really like the beginning of the chapter, it's like the author self was a part of the character who told the story to the readers and what caught my attention the most is the name 'Bermuda Triangle'. I'm curious to see how's the plot going to take me so might as well adding this book in my collection

Love the story line! The creativity of the world and charectors is also amazing. I love the comedy that appeared every now and then. The relationships between the charectors is so heartbreaking but so sweet. The only reason why the story is 4.6 is because of the update stability. I want more! lol. Definitely a very cute and interesting story. It started just a little slow with the first two or three chapters, but then it starts to pick up and boy it just keeps rolling, most of the time anyways. Keep up the great work! Looking forward to more chapters!