She is a young ever smiling lady but beneath her smile, a broken girl resides.
He is an established man who lost fell out of love in a second after an accident.
His girlfriend leaves him for his uncle, leaving him devastated.
This story is about two persons, Phoenix Jay, a massause owning her own shop and he, Jade Paulson a former devoted young Captain. They tackle life together, healing each others wounds.
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NB: The cover design is not mine.
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You tend to over word things and it snarls up the flow. Trim the unnecessary and keep your dialogue crisp by using the rule if I wouldn't say it neither should my characters. For instance you used sister in law instead of the characters name.
Your story has a unique tone to it. The plot is great and you used easy and understandable words. Please don't stop writing, I could see an upcoming bestseller Author in you. 💖💕💖💖💖
love the way this story is going and the plot and character development is great I'm definitely adding this book to my library, keep up the good work author❤️
well I don't want to give this a whole 5 cause there is still a room for improvement. show your support by reviewing this book. Porcupine_
I was a little confused in chapter one but as I read on things became clear. Jade seems to be a complex person and you have done well showing his frustration with his situation. Keep up the good work
Grrat start for an online novel! Extremely thrilling and exciting moments! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] Well done author, keep working hard!