A Hentai System in the World of Dungeon Ni Deai

This is the first time I've written fanfic and it's also the first time I've written h3nt41 content, so it probably won't be very good. I will try to get better and better at describing the scenes, but it's a little difficult xD Thanks to everyone who is reading! This story doesn't deserve 5 stars, but I'll give it since I'm the author lol

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First impression is not good, there is a lot of information missing, the mc feels like a japanese beta mc mixed with self centered chinese mc, but the good side of those two isn’t there, grammar is okay, but the flow feels awkward

MC is a submissive that likes being dominated. Author killed off bell, but then some readers cried so he changed it, now he helps bell instead. He gives most of his money to Hestia to help pay of her debts, not sure if that includes bells knife, I stopped reading at that point.

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The first 50 chapter is good but then it come to hia level up which destroyed it Instead of shop became skill share I dont know whata the writer thinking about hia mc abilities chu choices

it's a very good fanfic :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)

not well planned fanfic, i hope you can rewrite it to what was originally your idea and not be influenced by your readers unless it's for the better of the novel/novel go downhill. well 👍 for the effort keep writing and sorry for my grammar english is my third language after all.

To be honest I basically barely remember anything but the fact I'm still reading it means it's a good FF to read(in my opinion). SO read if you want.

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The setting and idea of the story are pretty good and the writing style is not too bad as well but it feels like the MC is a bit to scared all the time, acting like a weak Japanese mc and the interactions between characters feel completely empty like they are NPCs.