One Piece: Reborn as Enel

Cough cough... The author is here to shamelessly review his own work, nothing to see here, keep scrolling. >.> Btw, Enel's facial expressions are cracked up

Story was okay until it became absolute garbage once the MC meets the strawhats. Everything was so forced and now his “future” plans are extremely idiotic lol Do not waste your time on this fic.

I'm not gonna lie to you, the reason I decided to read this novel was because it doesn't have a harem. I didn't expect too much out of it, ya know. I thought it was just gonna be a bunch of gibberish with a lot of information dump and with little to no dialogues (or those awkward dialogues), but I was honestly surprised with how well-written it was. There are no grammatical errors (if there were, I missed them) and I actually enjoyed reading it (in other words, I read the available chapters in one sitting.) It's now in my library, and it's one of the novels in which I eagerly look forward to reading new chapters.

the author have thought well while writing the beginning cause the first two chapters were amazing then from the fourth chapter this story became simplictic or simply idiotic for a self proclaimed genius the imagination and creativity of author just vanished after chapter 4 the opening for this was unique purely brilliant for a fanfiction but alas i should have never expected something good cause I have never felt so much disappointment from a fanfiction (sorry for my English is not good )

MC's interaction with the straw hats was so forced and inorganic. The reason why I say the 'interaction' is because I really don't nitpick on the outcome of any scenario, but if the way you reach that outcome is a terrible, then I can't be bothered Other than that give it a read if you have the time, maybe the interaction won't irritate you as much as me.

The development of the story revolves around Luffy, he is the main character of the fanfic because the supposed main character is a fanboy of Luffy. In the first few chapters MC meets the "straw hat" crew. Furthermore, he tells them and other characters that he is a reincarnation, specifically stating that this is not his body. Since he met Luffy it could be seen that MC is Luffy's SiMP, which could be considered something... *cough* gay *cough*. MC joins the navy, faking his identity but... Luffy and all his crew know who he is. MC lets Nami go with the sky island gold, tells Robin about the stone; and the worst of all is that MC and author claim that he is a genius.

Reveal Spoiler

My first impression of this fanfic was good at first, but everything changed when he decided to join the marines to learn their techniques.He should have practiced his devil fruit abilities better instead of starting to learn new techniques. Moreover, he joined the marines where they would become his enemies in the future.And for haki he should be able to find a teacher to help him learn haki in the new world instead of joining the marines.Moreover, MC can hone his fighting skills in the new world because haki is supposed to develop through battle (google translate)

your character looks like a chinese protagonist It is a world of adventures because everyone is so obsessed with being a springboard for the protagonists and why do you want to destroy the world government if they do not represent any threat to those who do not want to discover the truth of the world and more in your case that you do not seek anything from the world and why did you send him to the navy to make him strong when you saw that the new generation of sailors can face the strongest pirates

The mc is disappointing I really hate these types of fisc "reborn as" and yet turn out nothing like the original character the story itself is not that bad I just don't like the mc.

I don't understand why he explains and explains to the old man and why he even needs to make up a story. Is he afraid that he won't accept him? Just give him electric shocks and he won't ask again why he's looking for excuses.

It's amazing how fanfiction authors can still screw up a story even though they have a complete world and character list that they can copy and take inspiration from the original. You literally have a huge world that you can use for your story but you shrunk it down and half assed it because either you're lazy or you really don't care or try writing a serious story. Lets also not forget how bad of a character you made Enel turn out to be and how overpowered he is. You made any and all forms of conflict obsolete simply because Enel can probably just beat and kill everyone in the story. The characters have had hardly any interactions between each other and there is not depth to any character so far and if there is you did a poor job at it. Simply put, the characters are boring, hollow dolls that I don't care to remember about. The plot is pretty much nonexistent. I truly don't know what or if there are any kind of story being told here. Some nobody gets reborn as Enel. We don't get any sort of development for him so we can't like or care for the character. Not just him(but mostly him) we don't have any plot or story or any details for anything thats going on. You just created some characters and threw them into a poorly made one piece world. I dont know what the goal and motivations of the character are. Whether he has dreams, likes, dislikes, you know core things that make people feel alive? tldr- Nobody gets reborn as Enel in one piece then proceeds to train... and find even better ways to train... Thats it. No one expects fanfiction to be good and your story can be added to the pile of mediocre fics that prove even more that fanfiction authors dont know what they are doing and clearly need to respect the world more. At least your story doesnt have the typical harem, where every girl falls for mc... or it? Wouldnt suprise me if you start thinking with your lower half and turn this into another pokemon collector.

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I hope this ends soon. There isn't really much to do now since the MC can just fly everywhere, has Jewelry Bonney who can just de-age Garp and WB, BB is dead and both the WG and Marines have become weaker than their canon counterparts. It's honestly impressive how One Piece fanfic authors manage to shrink the massive One Piece-verse and basically make Oda's worldbuilding obsolete by having giga op and trigger-happy MCs. I guess it's good that I finally got this one off of my collections, so I can focus on keeping up to date with the better ones. 3/5