Yusuke looked at the potential brother in law and smiled broadly, sharpening his sword: "If Izumi and Sasuke fall into the river, who will you save FIRST?"
The Mc acts like he is the smartest but in reality he is the dumbest. He got openly attacked by Danzo and the mc killed only one of Danzo's subordinate and gave danzo a warning which was useless as now Danzo is more fixated on the mc. The Mc knows shisui has kotoamatsumi and can take control of anyone and the mc even got the chance to take away shisui's eyes during the duel but still leaves him due to which now the naive shisui believes in the hiruzen more than before and hiruzen himself is fixated on Mc now. Mc couldn't even save yahiko what a waste of ryujin jakka. And author please make up your mind whether the mc knows the anime or not. The Mc conveniently forgets the plot completely and sometimes remembers minutes details that only a hardcore fan can know.
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All in all except the rate of chapters being published nothing else is good
The Mc wants to save the uchiha clan but by what he is doing now he may end up getting the uchiha clan eradicated a few years earlier.
3 years ago
39
Kiiiddd
Made it till chapter 15 in which the author involves the MC in a event that could majorly destroy the Canon events and the MC end up being absolutely stupid with the things that he could do.
It makes sense from a author's perspective that you don't want to completely destroy canon but reading the MC go thou that evnt was painful and I don't want to read a story about a "smart" MC that does a bunch of stupid stuff.
Author just should of stayed way away from that event
3 years ago
22
Futalord
Reveal Spoiler
3 years ago
13
95_novel_maniac_95
Although it's understandable but the fic definitely need to be edited, not expertly but a few small miss like rearrange the sentence properly, mixing between his/her time to time, as for grammar my isn't that good so I don't know but it's easy to understand though a bit annoying due to inconsistencies
as for story develop, the direction is good but it's not fleshed out, it's more in tune with cultivation type setting
for 10 chapter there is no need to focus on character development but the starting personality is quiet balanced.
aside from that there are lot of things that author got wrong but those are just minor things that can be ignored
all in all its a good attempt
3 years ago
11
asaade
since this is a Chinese fanfic then there's no reason to read this since it will just follow the canon and only change a little just like other trash chinese fanfic out there
3 years ago
9
Aseijuro
People do not forget that I am not the author of this book people the author of this book is Chinese and do not forget that I have no right to change anything there at all There are people who understand this There are people who do not understand this somehow they don’t care that I just translate the book A if you just want nothing in this book to be connected with China, then take it yourself translate this book
sorry for being rude
3 years ago
5
CanYouMakeItClear
Where's the MTL link? anyone knows or the Author care to leave a link? Or raw link, any link that can lead me to reading more! Thanks Thanks Thanks!
3 years ago
3
Abaddon1
Only 10 chapters so far but a really good story with lots of potential. (Hopefully he doesn't get so OP he will be able to 1 shot any Ōtsutsuki)
3 years ago
3
thefarmerboy007_7
I have read many good and bad Naruto novels it is one of good ones.the plot, character devlopment, imagination are all good.thanks.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
3 years ago
2
Gadloner
It's a good read if you want to pass time but it needs improvement in writing quality section.
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3 years ago
2
SpackRox
Are you the original author of this fanfiction or are you translating a chinese fanfiction?
If you are the original author, then keep on writing it as I have enjoyed the story very much. His golden finger is very interesting and I have yet to see any cliché plotline. Just try to improve the structure of the sentences as it sometimes become difficult to understand. Also you can use grammarly to proofread the chapters.
If you are translating, then would you please write the original link of the fanfic?
3 years ago
2
Tim_QQQ
chinese garbage
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a year ago
1
Invincible
Chinese novel translated into Russian, then to the English, ;)
Good to read new novels about Naruto, and my personal like is Bleach, but there is so small number of stories about Bleach, if you just edit it better, it gonna be 🔥
3 years ago
1
Snyprscopz
I was actually liking this novel until the mc got attacked by danzo and then pretty much just sucked him off. Then the plot forces Kushina to use all her life force to save Minato even tho the mc legit just saved him? Then they send naruto to an orphanage? Honestly its just a slightly better retelling of naruto with some cool fire powers thats about it. And Yes I can see Mt Tai
3 years ago
1
finalgetsuga
I really like this a lot and it was really fun reading I'm in chapter 30 right now and I cannot wait for more chapters to come I highly recommend this and author thank you for making such a good fanfic with a great mc
The Mc acts like he is the smartest but in reality he is the dumbest. He got openly attacked by Danzo and the mc killed only one of Danzo's subordinate and gave danzo a warning which was useless as now Danzo is more fixated on the mc. The Mc knows shisui has kotoamatsumi and can take control of anyone and the mc even got the chance to take away shisui's eyes during the duel but still leaves him due to which now the naive shisui believes in the hiruzen more than before and hiruzen himself is fixated on Mc now. Mc couldn't even save yahiko what a waste of ryujin jakka. And author please make up your mind whether the mc knows the anime or not. The Mc conveniently forgets the plot completely and sometimes remembers minutes details that only a hardcore fan can know. . . All in all except the rate of chapters being published nothing else is good The Mc wants to save the uchiha clan but by what he is doing now he may end up getting the uchiha clan eradicated a few years earlier.
Made it till chapter 15 in which the author involves the MC in a event that could majorly destroy the Canon events and the MC end up being absolutely stupid with the things that he could do. It makes sense from a author's perspective that you don't want to completely destroy canon but reading the MC go thou that evnt was painful and I don't want to read a story about a "smart" MC that does a bunch of stupid stuff. Author just should of stayed way away from that event
Reveal Spoiler
Although it's understandable but the fic definitely need to be edited, not expertly but a few small miss like rearrange the sentence properly, mixing between his/her time to time, as for grammar my isn't that good so I don't know but it's easy to understand though a bit annoying due to inconsistencies as for story develop, the direction is good but it's not fleshed out, it's more in tune with cultivation type setting for 10 chapter there is no need to focus on character development but the starting personality is quiet balanced. aside from that there are lot of things that author got wrong but those are just minor things that can be ignored all in all its a good attempt
since this is a Chinese fanfic then there's no reason to read this since it will just follow the canon and only change a little just like other trash chinese fanfic out there
People do not forget that I am not the author of this book people the author of this book is Chinese and do not forget that I have no right to change anything there at all There are people who understand this There are people who do not understand this somehow they don’t care that I just translate the book A if you just want nothing in this book to be connected with China, then take it yourself translate this book sorry for being rude
Where's the MTL link? anyone knows or the Author care to leave a link? Or raw link, any link that can lead me to reading more! Thanks Thanks Thanks!
Only 10 chapters so far but a really good story with lots of potential. (Hopefully he doesn't get so OP he will be able to 1 shot any Ōtsutsuki)
I have read many good and bad Naruto novels it is one of good ones.the plot, character devlopment, imagination are all good.thanks.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
It's a good read if you want to pass time but it needs improvement in writing quality section. .......... .......... .......... .......... ..........
Are you the original author of this fanfiction or are you translating a chinese fanfiction? If you are the original author, then keep on writing it as I have enjoyed the story very much. His golden finger is very interesting and I have yet to see any cliché plotline. Just try to improve the structure of the sentences as it sometimes become difficult to understand. Also you can use grammarly to proofread the chapters. If you are translating, then would you please write the original link of the fanfic?
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Chinese novel translated into Russian, then to the English, ;) Good to read new novels about Naruto, and my personal like is Bleach, but there is so small number of stories about Bleach, if you just edit it better, it gonna be 🔥
I was actually liking this novel until the mc got attacked by danzo and then pretty much just sucked him off. Then the plot forces Kushina to use all her life force to save Minato even tho the mc legit just saved him? Then they send naruto to an orphanage? Honestly its just a slightly better retelling of naruto with some cool fire powers thats about it. And Yes I can see Mt Tai
I really like this a lot and it was really fun reading I'm in chapter 30 right now and I cannot wait for more chapters to come I highly recommend this and author thank you for making such a good fanfic with a great mc