There are a few things that seem a little out of tune to me, why do you have to make others threaten him to say things, even if it's joking, why make the mc so beta? If you don't want to say something, don't say it, honestly friendships delay more than they enrich, for example, almost 100% sure that you will nerf the mc on certain occasions to show "the importance of others" when fighting or solving a problem , just look how you mention the "talents" of others, I understand that you want to give him a strong partner in his adventure to accompany him, but let's be honest, nobody reaches the level of someone reincarnated and motivated knowing what is coming, it is not It is necessary that they accompany you in strength, there is more than power in life, you just have to be there and now.
I'm bothering to write this because I feel that it has a lot of potential, I don't want it to be ruined by signs of "low self-esteem" or giving away knowledge of power to others, my friend, individuality exists.
As for the couple, Fleur is honestly my favourite, her character faces many facets of individuality, pride, loneliness, excessive affection due to that, support and going to the end, I hope you portray her well, not like a teenager blushed by others or shy, it's okay for her partner, because normally only your partner shows your "weak" sides.
That being said, I like your fic, I would like to help you review logic and reasoning, for free of course.
2 years ago
27
Thehighest_throne2
an average story for HP fic, nothing special and unique here, it's pretty bland in my own opinion. maybe a little spoiler so that those who read this comment can understand. 1, the story begins on Mc his seventh year at Hogwarts. 2, Slytherin's house But his attitude does not reflect it. 3, he's Dumbledore's dog. 4, I think he lacks creativity (I mean he has been in the wizarding world for a long time and is still following Dumbledore). 5, mc hero (Helping the golden trio). And most of the five stars above are spam, you should be careful if the author deletes my comment
2 years ago
22
hero4hire
same person is spamming 5 stars, author have a little shame
2 years ago
17
hero4hire
i dont like it.
2 years ago
9
Max_Dreamscape
Quite an unexpected but fresh beginning by the author. There is a lot of potential considering it begins at the turning point of the series. Looking forward to more updates.
2 years ago
9
Gilgamos
It was pretty good until the end of chapter 25 and throughout chapter 26 Hermione is now the half blood daughter of regulus black
2 years ago
7
Jonathan_Lam_2034
NTHputaox17 is spamming 5 stars...........
2 years ago
7
Bob_Uchiha_XD
Canon copy an pasted.
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2 years ago
5
Gaming_shadows
how can people read this i mean it starts off half way through the story giving you info about him without showing you how he gets there at all, it also doesn't even give any background about him or his friends/family, if you want to read a story that builds the character from the start dont read this as it just throws you into it halfway through
a year ago
4
LGK_maore
you have my full support for thd
amazing writtings reaaly appreciate what you do🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
me:big fan if harry potter ff🙋♂️🙋♂️🙋♂️❤❤
this is one of the good ff with a lot of twist and story development is pretty good as well.I'd say don't read other reviews and read the story then form your own opinion.the romance part is well written is well.
a year ago
2
Rizki_Caturianto
It's a great Harry Potter fanfiction!!
I like the story about MC which muggleborn orphan in Slytherin and he show them who's the boss (not been bullied by the others pureblood bigot in Slytherin house).. I also like about many Pov you use.. 😁👍👍
I don't mind he's pairing with whoever.. But I think same with you that Fleur and Tonks deserve better (not that Remus and Bill is bad, they great, but they deserve better)...
Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good job author san 😁😁👍
2 years ago
2
TinyBookDragon
All the spam reviews had me worried but this is great. The writing quality is top notch and the start is a refreshing change of pace from most fanfics so that's a huge plus. Definitely recommend giving this a try.
2 years ago
2
Jaghatai_Kahn
an absolute gem of a read, and the only thing I don't like is the way the last chapter tried to end.other than that, it's a must-read for H.P. fans.
There are a few things that seem a little out of tune to me, why do you have to make others threaten him to say things, even if it's joking, why make the mc so beta? If you don't want to say something, don't say it, honestly friendships delay more than they enrich, for example, almost 100% sure that you will nerf the mc on certain occasions to show "the importance of others" when fighting or solving a problem , just look how you mention the "talents" of others, I understand that you want to give him a strong partner in his adventure to accompany him, but let's be honest, nobody reaches the level of someone reincarnated and motivated knowing what is coming, it is not It is necessary that they accompany you in strength, there is more than power in life, you just have to be there and now. I'm bothering to write this because I feel that it has a lot of potential, I don't want it to be ruined by signs of "low self-esteem" or giving away knowledge of power to others, my friend, individuality exists. As for the couple, Fleur is honestly my favourite, her character faces many facets of individuality, pride, loneliness, excessive affection due to that, support and going to the end, I hope you portray her well, not like a teenager blushed by others or shy, it's okay for her partner, because normally only your partner shows your "weak" sides. That being said, I like your fic, I would like to help you review logic and reasoning, for free of course.
an average story for HP fic, nothing special and unique here, it's pretty bland in my own opinion. maybe a little spoiler so that those who read this comment can understand. 1, the story begins on Mc his seventh year at Hogwarts. 2, Slytherin's house But his attitude does not reflect it. 3, he's Dumbledore's dog. 4, I think he lacks creativity (I mean he has been in the wizarding world for a long time and is still following Dumbledore). 5, mc hero (Helping the golden trio). And most of the five stars above are spam, you should be careful if the author deletes my comment
same person is spamming 5 stars, author have a little shame
i dont like it.
Quite an unexpected but fresh beginning by the author. There is a lot of potential considering it begins at the turning point of the series. Looking forward to more updates.
It was pretty good until the end of chapter 25 and throughout chapter 26 Hermione is now the half blood daughter of regulus black
NTHputaox17 is spamming 5 stars...........
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how can people read this i mean it starts off half way through the story giving you info about him without showing you how he gets there at all, it also doesn't even give any background about him or his friends/family, if you want to read a story that builds the character from the start dont read this as it just throws you into it halfway through
you have my full support for thd amazing writtings reaaly appreciate what you do🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥 me:big fan if harry potter ff🙋♂️🙋♂️🙋♂️❤❤
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this is one of the good ff with a lot of twist and story development is pretty good as well.I'd say don't read other reviews and read the story then form your own opinion.the romance part is well written is well.
It's a great Harry Potter fanfiction!! I like the story about MC which muggleborn orphan in Slytherin and he show them who's the boss (not been bullied by the others pureblood bigot in Slytherin house).. I also like about many Pov you use.. 😁👍👍 I don't mind he's pairing with whoever.. But I think same with you that Fleur and Tonks deserve better (not that Remus and Bill is bad, they great, but they deserve better)... Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good job author san 😁😁👍
All the spam reviews had me worried but this is great. The writing quality is top notch and the start is a refreshing change of pace from most fanfics so that's a huge plus. Definitely recommend giving this a try.
an absolute gem of a read, and the only thing I don't like is the way the last chapter tried to end.other than that, it's a must-read for H.P. fans.