Currently I believe the story to be quite good, although there is a severe lack of why the character wanted to do all the things that happened in volume one.
I believe in the second volume there should be a flash back arc (should be > 50% of the chapter and it should contain character motivations)
A possible third arc could include pucci and attempting to reach heaven? Or Jolyne actually trying to get revenge on the mc or even the events of Golden Wind
2 years ago
2
Aersuy
Shameless author review, as my third webnovel, hopefully I can make this one even better than my previous ones.
2 years ago
2
Elisya_Best_Waifu
Me gusta la historia pero siento que se está separando de la prota, con el tiempo que tarda en actualizar y que casi no salga la prota siento que pues ya no parece la prota y es un libro de múltiples perspectivas sin algún protagonista.
Currently I believe the story to be quite good, although there is a severe lack of why the character wanted to do all the things that happened in volume one. I believe in the second volume there should be a flash back arc (should be > 50% of the chapter and it should contain character motivations) A possible third arc could include pucci and attempting to reach heaven? Or Jolyne actually trying to get revenge on the mc or even the events of Golden Wind
Shameless author review, as my third webnovel, hopefully I can make this one even better than my previous ones.
Me gusta la historia pero siento que se está separando de la prota, con el tiempo que tarda en actualizar y que casi no salga la prota siento que pues ya no parece la prota y es un libro de múltiples perspectivas sin algún protagonista.