TWISTED FATE: THE BILLIONAIRE'S FORBIDDEN AFFAIR
SYNOPSIS
The day she walked into that mansion her life was forever transformed. And all it took was his lovely smile to sweep her off her feet on the first meeting for her to tumble into the deep trap of a twisted and forbidden affair.
When confronted with such a dramatic situation, Avita felt it was immoral and refused to compromise her values to satisfy her lust and desire for her friend’s father. But, once fate had been decided, there was no way out.
Her tenacity and determination left a lasting impression on him. Her delectable, soothing, and calming fragrance kept tempting him to do the forbidden, and he succumbed to his desires.
She was everything he loved and despised, and her presence in his life confused everything.
He wanted to keep plucking the forbidden fruit, despite the grave repercussions. And the repercussions of his avarice caused him considerable pain.
When two people from separate worlds with different agendas meet due to circumstances, plots, and tricks designed as fate. What do you think will happen?
What do you think will happen when the virtuous and flawless lover and girlfriend reveal herself to be something no one expected her to be?
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Good plot, great storyline. As always you have a unique plot which entices the reader to want more. However there are some glaring weaknesses that I noted you might want to attend to. In chapter 1 you make reference to a cabin house, which is like over kill. Use of cabin already gives the picture of a wooden or log house. You go on to describe Avita in chapter 2 as, wearing 'some glasses', the use of some in that case is inappropriate. I would suggest you go with, ...'wearing eye glasses or simply glasses. You have a great story which I believe would read even better if you change present tense to past tense, do that you are doing more of narrating. You did a great job of that in, Online Cougar System, and please proof read your work. Otherwise I love the way you are building up the story. The way you ended chapter1 is a quite a cliffhanger. The way you proceed to chapter 2 where we are now seeing Avita years later, brilliant.
Good story from my pov, just work on a few changes, the story is nice keep it up
A recommendation led me here and then the synopsis got me curious and heading to chapter 1, my curiosity even piqued more. Really wanna know wats going on with the FL and all the mysteries hidden within all this. Looking forward to more from this and hoping for a good end.
Got hooked by the synopsis from the word go and something about Avita from the early chapters just doesn't seem right. Just a few chapters in but already looking forward to more of this.
Gooooooooooooooo Avitaaaaaa. In love with the female lead and can't wait to read more and find out what is going on there. Keep up the good work.
An interesting book from the beginning, very very descriptive and good world background. Avita character is a very interesting character and with the few chapters read, I know that there is more to her character. I'm curious to know how she will end up. Nice story author, I'm rooting for you.
It's such a wonder how our past traumas can lead us to become some monsters we never dreamed of becoming from the start. Really enjoyed reading the book, especially Avita's duality.
I can tell that the plot is well made and is catchy from the ch 1 .I like the descriptions and the writing style however i think you should work more on your dialogues....make them more natural in a way .Not sure if you get what i am trying to say but over all is good .Brush it a little and you are good to go .Keep up ! // I like the super aware FL that is smart low key .Hope to see more of her in future ..
This book is honestly a standout. The plot keeps you on your toes, and the characters are super relatable. The writing is good but I am sure the author can do much better. Keep up the good work author!
Interesting read and not my normal genre so I'm not sure if it fits into the usual genre tropes, but I really enjoyed it. The main character is interesting and engaging and following her story was enjoyable. It felt like I was peeking into a different culture. The first chapter was exciting and a good start.
The story flows smoothly with a captivating plot about how the author had written this how the protagonist suffers and how the character interact with each other it feels natural Keep up the good work
I like the start because I believe the hook is essential and draws the crowd. The characters are well, I can't say a lot about them, but still, I think we will get to know more about them as the story progresses. the narration is a bit strained, with a few spelling errors, and sentence formation errors, but it doesn't really bother me very much.
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The story plot is interesting. The writing is good but I am sure the author can do much better. Keep up the good work author! Full support! [img=recommend]