Monsters Underneath
Author: Crisp107
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Two ordinary friends find themselves getting exactly what they wanted. Be careful what you wish for.
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For a first chapter this was pretty solid it felt a little fast paced but overall I'm really looking forward to the future And so far I've enjoyed it.
It's a really good rough draft for the first chapter! Few grammatical errors here and there but doesn't effect the story at all. Worldbuilding and character design/description could use a bit of work and it did feel a bit rushed for the plot twist and some minor repeats of events in different POVs that felt a little unnecessary. Overall i'm pretty hooked and i'm excited to see what happens next ^^
I see potential for an amazing story! While currently there isn’t a whole lot, the character and story development seems to be similar to that of a seasoned writer. While there are some minor grammatical errors, they don’t affect the story too much. Overall, I can’t wait to see where this goes!
Good second chapter!! Although I'm seeing a bit of the switching happening too often. Splitting the chapter in half and choosing 2 POVs makes it more seamless. Along with some bit of repeating dialoge with different characters that's my own nitpick. I'm quite curious about Gustavo and how he'll play a part in the story!