Chapter 9: In the Shadow of Loss: The Day They Left Us (4)
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[Forty-three minutes ago, while the system was counting down...]
Today will be the day I torture you both for the embarrassment you brought me. the Yong master said.
Young Master, I have blocked their energy channel so they won't attempt suicide by self-destruction or trying anything stupid. the elderly man said.
Well done, Elder. the Young Master said.
Go and tie up Mo Xuan and Hu Huanzian. Young Master said.
Yes, Young Master. Lackeys' said in unison.
Take Hu Huanzian to the room. Said Young Master.
When both husband and wife heard this, fear started rising in their hearts.
Yu Mian!!! No, You wo---. Suddenly a punch came at his jaw making him pass out. while his teeth flew away and blood splashed on the floor.
No dear!!![Please someone save us]
How dare you vermin rise your voice at me. Yu Mian said after punching him.
Young master, is he dead. Should we take out his corpse. Asked one of his servants. While the elder watches the scene as if nothing happened.
There is no need for it his just unconscious. Young master said.
[After saying this Yu Mian turned and looked at Hu Huanzian as if looking at prey]
Hu Huanzian 10 years ago you rejected me . Now this your retribution for what had happened back then. Yu Mian said.
Yu Mian started to get closer to Hu Huanzian. While Hu Huanzian tried to suicide but no avail. With pressure from a root cultivator it was a joke to move.
When Yu Mian reached close to Hu Huanzian and started to lift her clothes. He suddenly felt a life fluctuation from her belly.
This life fluctuation. This No!Nooo!!! How dare you get pregnant with the seed of vermin. You filth. Yu Mian shouted angrily at Hu Huanzian.
After shouting he walked away with anguish
[Whew, luckily worst-case scenario did not happen.]
Suddenly when she heard what Yu Mian. She became terrified to the core. With look of only fear and terror in her eyes.
Hey, you two. Enjoy her to the point where she would feel like she should have died. Yu Mian said with a crazy twisted look.
Yes, Young Master. They both said in unison.
[What luck we have today to think we can have our fun the most beautiful women from 10 years]They Both thought at the same time.
Hey, let's take turns. Said one of them.
Ok.
[30 min later]
Mo Xian started to open his eye's while whispering hu'er. To his terror the first scene what he saw made him his blood and pressure to rise to highest possible point.
Yu Miaaan!!! Today either of us will die. Mo Xian shouted at his lungs making him hard to breath.
Either of us will die? Hmm... HaHaHaa!! your right you will die soon. So will Your wife. Yu Mian said Sarcasticly
[Blood and Essence Burning Technique-Maximum](he said in his mind)
So, you---. Before Yu Mian could finish his sentence. The Withered elderly man took him and disappeared from there.
I am sorry Hu'er.
Booom!!!!
The entire house was destroyed leaving nothing but memories behind.
Elder didn't you say that you have blocked his energy channel so he won't self-destruct. Yu Main asked angrily.
It was because of technique. It uses life essence's energy rather than spiritual energy. Which made him possible to self-destruct. The elderly man said with no emotion.
Tch. Whatever he was destined to die, let's return to home. Yu Mian said.
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Revised version from personal AI
The air in the house of Mo Xian and Hu Huanzian was thick with tension, a foreboding sense of doom that seemed to cling to the very walls. The once warm and welcoming home now felt like a prison, its occupants trapped in a nightmare from which there was no escape.
Mo Xian, a proud and defiant cultivator, knelt on the cold stone floor, his hands bound tightly behind him. His face was swollen and bruised, a testament to the brutality he had already endured. Beside him, his wife Hu Huanzian huddled in terror, her eyes wide with fear as she clung to the last shreds of her dignity.
"Today, you will both suffer for the humiliation you brought upon me," Yu Mian declared, his voice dripping with malice. The Young Master stood tall and imposing, flanked by his elder cultivator and two lackeys. His eyes glinted with sadistic glee, reveling in the power he held over them.
The elder cultivator, a withered man with a cold, detached expression, nodded in agreement. "I've blocked their energy channels. They won't be able to escape or attempt anything foolish."
Yu Mian's lips curled into a cruel smile. "Good. Now, bind Mo Xian and Hu Huanzian."
The lackeys moved swiftly, securing the couple with ropes that bit into their skin. The fear in their eyes was palpable, a silent plea for mercy that went unheeded.
"Take Hu Huanzian to the other room," Yu Mian commanded.
As the lackeys dragged Hu Huanzian away, Mo Xian struggled against his restraints, his heart pounding with desperation. "Yu Mian! No, you can't—"
Before he could finish, Yu Mian's fist collided with his jaw, sending him crashing to the ground. Blood splattered across the floor, and Mo Xian's vision blurred as he slipped into unconsciousness.
"How dare you raise your voice at me," Yu Mian sneered, wiping the blood from his knuckles.
One of the lackeys glanced at Mo Xian's limp form, concern flickering in his eyes. "Is he dead? Should we remove the body?"
"There's no need. He's just unconscious," Yu Mian replied dismissively.
Turning his attention to Hu Huanzian, Yu Mian's gaze grew predatory. "Ten years ago, you rejected me. Now, this is your retribution."
Hu Huanzian trembled as Yu Mian approached, her mind racing for a way out. She tried to muster the strength to fight back, but the pressure from the root cultivator rendered her powerless.
As Yu Mian's hands began to lift her clothes, he suddenly froze, his expression shifting from triumph to shock. He sensed a faint, yet unmistakable, fluctuation of life energy emanating from her belly.
"This energy… No! How dare you bear the seed of another!" Yu Mian's face contorted with rage and disgust. He stormed away, leaving Hu Huanzian trembling and helpless.
Turning back, his voice twisted with sadistic pleasure, he ordered, "Enjoy her to the point where she wishes for death."
"Yes, Young Master," the lackeys replied in unison, their eyes gleaming with anticipation. They moved toward Hu Huanzian, their actions driven by a perverse sense of satisfaction.
Thirty minutes later, Mo Xian began to stir. Pain shot through his body as he opened his eyes, his vision slowly clearing. The sight that greeted him was a scene of horror and despair. Hu Huanzian lay crumpled on the floor, her spirit shattered by the torment she had endured.
"Yu Mian! We will die today!" Mo Xian shouted, his voice raw with anguish.
Yu Mian laughed mockingly. "Indeed, you will die soon. And so will your wife."
Desperation fueled Mo Xian's actions as he channeled a forbidden technique, consuming his life essence in a final, desperate attempt to save his wife.
"Blood and Essence Burning Technique—Maximum!" he thought, feeling his life force surge.
Before Yu Mian could react, the elder cultivator intervened, whisking Mo Xian away in a flash of speed. The house erupted in a deafening explosion, the force of Mo Xian's sacrifice obliterating everything in its path.
As the dust settled, Yu Mian glared at the elder cultivator. "Didn't you say you had blocked his energy channels?"
The elder cultivator remained emotionless. "The technique used life essence rather than spiritual energy, allowing him to self-destruct."
Yu Mian spat on the ground, his frustration evident. "He was destined to die anyway. Let's return home."
As they departed, the ruins of the house stood as a stark reminder of the cruelty and devastation wrought by power and revenge. The lives of Mo Xian and Hu Huanzian were shattered, their love and defiance consumed by the flames of vengeance.
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