Yin, a charming teenager with a passion for video games, suddenly finds himself trapped in a game world known as Parallel City. Here, he must navigate a competitive landscape filled with powerful players. Given the chance to choose his abilities and level up, Yin quickly realizes he’s outmatched and seen as weak by others. Determined to prove his worth, he throws himself into battles, striving to gain new skills and abilities. With each fight, he seeks to rise above the challenges and earn respect in a city where strength reigns supreme. Will he become the hero he dreams of, or will he remain just another low-level player?
To be honest, you need to rewrite the whole thing, your spelling grammar, synopsis, capitalism etc you also need to expand on the Overall world system other wise its a pretty solid book