Toji in My Hero Academia

Hi! This is a new project I’m working on. I wondered: what if Toji Fushiguro were reborn in a world full of heroes and villains? I’m trying to develop this idea and see how far it can go. I hope you like it

Ok so first things first this IS Toji from jjk reincarnating in mha, not some guy who met God and wanted to look like Toji with his abilities. With the way the story is going so far, it's portrayal of Toji is quite poor. Given how Toji usually acts and views his own life and the lives of others, he's very out of character the whole FF. Especially with who you decided to choose as the love interest, which seems to be Momo. Just a quick reminder, Toji was a grown ass man with a dead wife and abandoned his child in his last life. The mental age difference between Toji and Momo is making Toji look real creepy, the 'pull up to the playground in a white van and start offering little kids candy' creepy. Truthfully I believe the best way would have been no romance at all, for her truly loved his dead wife to the point he couldn't bring himself to love again after her death. Also, his relationship with his 'mother' is another thing that feels quite forced. The way that they interact would definitely cause Toji to run away from home just like he did from the zenin clan in jjk, family doesn't mean shit to him. We all know that Toji ALWAYS puts himself first, the needs of others are irrelevant to him. So him willingly choosing to go to U.A all because of Momo's hurt feelings is just really off putting. To put it simply, it's really just forced plot for Toji to interact with the main cast of mha. I just feel like Toji would literally want nothing to do with heroes given the difference in mindsets, and Toji would be a pretty shitty hero given how well he took care of his own child. He wouldn't like not being able to kill, that would be a thing of conflict between him and the actual heroes of Japan. Going through all the capture and arrest procedures would be too much of a hassle when he would rather shoot all his problems away. He would literally only care about the paycheck after all, what others think of him doesn't matter as long as he could gamble his life away like a bum. Overall the story is decent, but it could be better if things went differently and if Toji was more in character to his canon counterpart in jjk. It probably would've been better if you just chose to make a guy that wanted to be Toji in mha type fic instead of actually choosing Toji.

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Toji spotted

ohhh, interesting. Dark end, Dark beginning, Toji getting his character fleshed out, and Povs of mother who is struggling to adapt to a mother's life. Watched with interest, please update, and godspeed.

All in all this is a an average fanfic nothing to really be upset about but there is also nothing to get that excited about so Writing Quality: 2 Updating Stability:4 Story Development: 2 Character Design: 3 world background:2

It's just the beginning but it looks really promising. The Author got the personality of Toji right and the world building is pretty fleshed out and soulful for sure, most stories fail at that.

High quality work but updates are slow. Patience is a virtue 😔

It's a good thing Toji somehow kept his super strength after being reincarnated Into an entirely different universe because he needs it to carry this fanfiction. Everything in the story so far just seems forced.

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Excellent writing, The author has an exceptional understanding of toji's character. which allows him to give him some really tasty character development. and it completely reflects his new upbringing in the MHA world, like for example how he doesn't like getting gifts and money for his poor mother, but he is still money-hungry toji with everyone else. and him learning from his past mistakes from his past life in JJK to the point, he wants to give being a hero a try. (though he is only doing it because the people he cares about want him to.)

12 chapters so far but really good, characters are actually kind of fleshed out and not like other fics, Toji actually keeping up his personality and not some completely different person.

Definitely a top-tier story, also W character development.

Take the dialogue with a grain of salt. I understand the Author wants character growth from Toji and growing up in a new life and being affected by hormones but some of it just feels like an OC with how they talk. Like, everything Toji does I can see that Toji in some fashion he would do but he wouldnt talk about or go about it that way. Like giving Uraraka a pep talk or how 'vocal' he is about certain things. Toji is doing alot of talking instead of showing. He may do those things but he wouldn't have voiced it so blantantly. a few examples like how he shouts at Uraraka and threw her towards Midoriya. Toji was an assassin, he has shown that he doesn't trust anything but his own strength in the past. But in this he trusts an untested gauntlet because its a gift from Momo and a examinee he barely spoken to. He also voices thoughts like "Can't they see they might injure themselves or worse have causalities??" or other thoughts like "Heh, I'm a genius" things that could be conveyed in a tone alot more in tune with his character such as "Are they mad?" and just "Heh." with a smug grin. It's just like, make him more subdued even if it's because of character development. Theres also a fact that he shouts "He's going to kill himself if we dont do something can you still use your quirk?" As if didn't blitz Dagon. So Toji is abit nerfed, maybe because he's younger but he's still been training alongside his heavenly restriction.