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ok, so. First of all, It's not a bad story, not at all. It's actually quite a good story at parts and I'm sure alot of people will enjoy it. However, it is bad(compared to what I usually read on this site or royalroad). I know why but at the same time it isn't very clear, I'll just say it like this. I've read alot of novels and after maybe 6 chapters or so, the writting changes. From clear with personalities that have cause for what and why. It then changes into something different. I wouldn't go so far as to say it becomes trash, because the idea and execution is still there. Rather it becomes more akin to when you read a translated chinese novel in how sentances and plays on words are carried. I know that english is the authors second language(which is why it is fine for those who don't care, frankly it is my second language too), but when the story begins to go from an attempted writting in english to something that feels more like a close translation from native tongue due to usage of uncommon words(like hyper uncommon words like;Pusillanimous or Askance, which sure yes can be used but when the rest of the story has the writting range of an 11th grader isn't really expected unless it's translated from spanish to english or similar) All of this is to say, story is decent. Really went away from canon fully, characters aren't charactering and their personalities haven't changed since they were 6 in-universe. Aside from that the way it's written, as in the feel of the text itself just kinda hurts my brain in a way only translated works with unnatural flow do and I enjoy reading olde ye english 1800s books or old translations of medieval works for fun, so thats saying something.

you know mc is something special when he is the only one with a japanese name in the world. Also the sequence of events in relation to his identity makes it impossible for mc to navigate fire nation society without being killed before maturity. especially within near proximity with royalty.

Dear god where do I begin, characters are meh some are good but the majority didn’t have that much depth, the pacing is DOGWATER, also apparently the author likes to nerf his mc, couldn’t even beat a 4 year old azula bro had to rely on his cheat bruh, conclusion story is below average grammar isn’t that bad could use some work, world building doesn’t need to be explained it’s literally ATLA, in the end i didn’t like it, it just wasted my time

this story is really amazing. long chapter, interesting story line, very good character interactions, and more importantly MC has his brain still healthy... he knew very what he is doing, not outright rejecting fire nation like some other FF. the only flaw is lacking chapter, so i would like to asking the AUTHOR about More chapter please....

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Meh. WQ 5/5 SoU 2/5 SD 3/5 CD 4/5 WB 3/5 Overall 3.4/5

Without much discussion, 5 stars for this new novel. Do not read anyone’s opinions or any other nonsense. Go and read the novel with a heart of steel.

A very interesting story, the beginning had some stumbles, some parts of the story are cliché, it has a good amount of filler chapters but most of them explain things about the characters, I always skip the +18 chapters, I don't read a story because it's a little too risqué, I read the story to understand what it wants to convey and tell, it's a good read and very entertaining, I even gave my two cents in some parts because I really loved it, I really recommend this story, let's hope it isn't abandoned

Having read up to chapter 30, as it seems to me, the story just went smoothly into daily routine, absolutely no development in the plot, everything is too boring, everything is too ordinary, everything is too sweet. There are no enemies, no battles, no intrigue, etc, the main character is absolutely ordinary, well yes there are brains and talent in spiritual terms, well that's it. There are not even strong enemies that will make the hero and his team overstep their limits, the romance development between Ang and Katara is too artificial, not alive, puppet-like in general. In general, if you want just everyday life, I recommend it, but if you came for action, intrigue, exciting plot, it's better to look for something else, personally I'm tired of reading monotonous chapters.

The story gets better every time I read the chapters, I can't even wait for more chapters. ...............................................................................

It's a very good read so far, I hope the story continues as it has and doesn't get dropped.

A unique take on the Avatar world. I love how it focuses on the world building and the advancements the fire nation is making. Also how the royal family is not so dysfunctional anymore. And from the bottom of my heart I thank thee for not using chatgpt to edit the story. I loath those stories with it even though the concept of the whole story is excellent. Thank you for using grammarly.