That time I was reincarnated as a snake (Tensura)

the snake 🐍 looks like a poop 💩 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 ...

going to make this boil up to like 50 chap then will come back

I have a question is this story going to be a harem?

here is my review, I've read 12 chapters of your story, and I have to say the concept is solid. Overall, it's a readable and enjoyable first novel. Mine was a disaster when I started, but that was mostly because I didn’t use any tools to improve. That said, I want to point out a few things that, if taken into account, could help you level up your writing. 1. Too much telling, not enough showing. You often state that an event happened without actually describing it. This makes the story feel bland. I’ve seen other authors get called out for the same thing—it’s a common issue, but improving it will make a big difference. 2. Avoid justifying what's good or bad. Sometimes, instead of letting the story unfold naturally, it feels like you're making a case for why something is good or bad. This can come off as ranting rather than storytelling, which breaks immersion. 3. Cut down on complaints. The MC constantly complains about how hard things are and compares himself to Rimuru. It makes him feel like he has an inferiority complex, which can get frustrating for the reader. If that’s intentional, that’s fine, but too much of it can drag the story down. 4. Overuse of fourth-wall breaks. Breaking the fourth wall can be fun, but doing it too often makes it lose its impact. Instead of being funny, it ends up feeling like something is smashing my head. These are the four major issues I noticed, though there are other smaller ones. But if I went into all of them, this would turn into a full-blown rant. That being said, improvement comes with time and practice. I’ve gone through it myself. I started writing a year ago in my free time, and I’ve seen progress. From my perspective, your story is already much better prepared than mine was when I first started—I just jumped into it on a whim. If you're interested, you can check out my story Survival in Akame ga Kill. It might seem cliché at first, but I’ve worked on upping my game. You can find the link in my profile. I hope you keep writing and improving. Maybe when your story reaches 100 chapters, I’ll come back and read it again. Best of luck!

Looking forward to the future of this novel

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pls write as much as you can this is amazing. ..................................................................................................................

good story, good grammar and no harem. cant wait for more chapters

This is a great fanfic, please don't stop writing

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