ummm...I think you need to put the quotation marks at the dialogue to make it become clearer, and also...try to make the story a show rather then a tell, if you can... but overall, it's the writing the problem, if you managed to correct it, then it will be improved.
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Papri_Mondol
I liked this book as it has a good way to take you through a fantastic journey... Keep adding the chapters...
ummm...I think you need to put the quotation marks at the dialogue to make it become clearer, and also...try to make the story a show rather then a tell, if you can... but overall, it's the writing the problem, if you managed to correct it, then it will be improved.
I liked this book as it has a good way to take you through a fantastic journey... Keep adding the chapters...