Game of thrones: The Lustful sellsword

Legit doesn't get more boring than this, every single letter in the story was written by some sort of LLM(very likely ChatGPT), system is boring and inconsistent, mc is boring, chapters are repetitive and most of what's written is filler.

the whole book is just a checklist. system? checked without explanation. power? wealth? reputation? checked with time skip. sex? checked within a chapter? smut? checked with simple narrative. no depth story here. no passionate smut here. a boring one indeed

It’s clearly chat gpt written with all the Sub Titles, bullet points, and bolded words.

TLDR: Decent Junk Food I read up to the latest chapter available (56). Writing Quality is pretty good. - 3/5 The way you format sentences until chap 25 is a bit off but still okay. And sometimes when you use the bold you use it too much. I would say only use it for inner thoughts that will help. Otherwise Okay. Updates I think for now are good. - 5/5 I just found this story and it already has 56 chapters so that's a good sign. Story Development - 2/5 It's an old concept with a twist. I like the premise of someone from our world being transported into GOT and has a system that promotes the path of a sell sword and Lust. You did the beginning well and had me hooked instantly. But I wont lie I was upset when you did a massive time skip, and then added zero deep context or information about the 9 years. Like you informed us a nine year time skip in one chapter using a checklist style. But I understand FTP lol. It threw me off so badly lol that will turn off a lot of new readers that are reading your story. I'm hoping everything you skipped over in the time skip comes out later into the story. Like where is the people that owe him? any flashbacks? any powers outside of Westeros that he owns? And if so why did he decide to do this by himself solo? You said he owned cities? Also like Magic ? and there's like a lot of real lore about the GOT verse that you could've added to instead make the transition easier and to add more fluff to the time skip. Like you started off slow it took 8 chapters for him to get some action and then boom straight to the skip. And there's a lot of plot holes because of it. Like one example if he was that famous as a sell sword at least someone would've heard of him which makes the fact that no one in Westeros recognizing him highly improbable in the later scenes and stuff like that. You also haven't really introduced the system like in depth. Only recently have you introduced more of the system by the the quest. And you haven't really kept an accurate track of his growth. Like what doesn't also make sense is like his goal. Like to be with women and to eat the best food but he doesn't want to rule. He could've lived like this already? (that's the problem with Gary Stu characters in a lot of GOT fanfics imo but I still eat it up lol.) Writing is a lot harder then people give it credit for so this is really good stuff for a first time novel keep nurturing it. You got talent at writing and at R scenes (way harder to write then you think) and people pay for that stuff so work on it and you can get commissioned for that. I'm hoping you explore more of the world (Other Kingdoms) as well. There's more but I will stop lol. Still I like where this is going. Wasted potential in some ways but I like the book. Character - 4/5 I like his mentality, his actions, thoughts, and the way the author portrays him to us. He needs more humanization for the readers to get attached to him and more emotions during these monologues. (But I love the way he is now and this is my perfect sweet spot as I like cold logical characters.) its just I try to speak more so for general taste of readers. World - GOT. 5/5 (thanks for reading all of this if you did.)

This is definitely AI written to some extent. Early on is a time skip of 9 years. Mc goes on to become a 'legendary' sellsword, his name is feared and revered. The ghost, shadow, reaper, and other shiet. He has contacts in Westeros and Essos. But he's got all his hard assets in Essos. All his establishments, its where he established his contacts and networks. Its where he spent his time until he returned to Westeros with some 'Time to let Westeros know I'm back' bullshit. But after the time skip what does he decide to do? Go the route Jorah Mormont did, but better? Get in early with Dany? Nope. Go North. Where his assets will have fuck-all of an impact. The most insolated kingdom. Why? Because he wants to dick down Sansa Stark. Mc has a hard-on for redheads, the few women he's slept with are all redheads. Fuck Mc is retarded. He's hyped to all hell and it's like watching a balloon deflate.

Very likely ChatGPT. Lots of repeating, most of the chapters feel mostly filler, everything goes too perfect, and though I actually do somewhat like the mc he feels kinda mechanical. It's actually not bad for what I suspect to be an AI fic.

Everything is perfect so far! Nice introduction to the story not too much time wasted in the beginning, only thing I criticise is the length of the chapters. Please make them longer.

Good story so far the only criticism would be the sansa stuff never really liked the character so the mc wanting her is disappointing and the way he is in relation to her seems very stalker/how to catch a predator in the way he is with/to her.

If you can get through the first 30-40 chapters, then you will finally encounter some originality in this FF. I was about to drop this until the new twist made it somewhat interesting. I'll keep this for now until my next purging of slow or dead FF.

i cant believe im saying this. its a. ai fic better than most fics out there. sure theres those ai formatting. checklists, bolds, subtitles, redundancies. but if u look at it overall, the plot is coherent, mc has clear motivations, it made new plot entirely. THINK ABOUT IT. theres those fics that just insert mc's while leaving plotlines untouched. just replacing og mc with their caricature. this one has a ballsier dude than whats out there

The story is comprised of short series of mini plots and checklists it feels more like a precursor to a story than an actual story. He uses bullet points and summarizes plotlines and writes them in bold text. OMG the obnoxious bold font words and sentences scattered among paragraphs make it clear the author is in his chuuni phase. BTW if you can't even keep track of your system and attribute changes just refrain from writing a system story. That's basic common sense.

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Very dry read, I wouldnt be surprised if this story is AI generated.

Writing in the Game of Thrones world would be hard, but there are certain things that in this story are just forced to happen to fast, just for the sake of it.