Invincible: superman

base superman in invincible? now that verse is cooked

Bro, work on your English and the writing quality. This gave me headaches. Also, at some point, the chapters were too short, and some individual chapters didn't serve any particular purpose.

So the writing style hurts to read. Superman is peak hero. He doesnt live up to the superman ideal. And theres tons of inconsistency for example "hes fidleing with his phone when he hears a ring from his pocket, its his phone so he picks it up." Just things like that. Overal it sucks.

I cannot comment on whether the novel is good or bad. You haven't even decided how you will convey the dialogues to the readers. You can either use "cecil:" or "-" as if you were writing a play. However, neither of them are used. Please use at least one AI. Even basic chatcpt is enough

From the moment he goes into the ghost zone the story becomes incoherent.

I liked this, are you going to include all the heroes that appeared in the Invincible comics or just the ones from the series? For example, Spawn, Firebreather, Pitt, etc. If so, it would be possible to greatly increase the content of the fanfiction, and what is MC's power level in relation to the Viltrumites? It would be annoying if he defeated them very easily but it would also be illogical if he couldn't deal with them since Kryptonians are super powerful.

I’ve consumed 13 chapters, and I have to say I like the story. However, I don’t like that the names are placed before each dialogue and then specified again afterward. For example: Henry: I hope you understand that I appreciate you, said Henry. Do you see what I mean? It’s redundant, or at least for me, since I use a screen reader to listen to the chapters, and hearing the same name multiple times gets tiring.

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Damn man, we need Henry beating up Nolan for today. It was very mean to stall in this chapter. And we want the world to know how powerful Superboy is. I hope he actually becomes Superman after the fight. And let it be epic.

damn this one had potential. too many are lost like that

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