MLP: Wizbell's Journey
Author: HappyDragon
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Destiny or chaos, I wouldn't know the reason, but for some reason my life had a clean slate.
Now I am Wizbell Star, a little colt with great desires to explore magic and this new place full of Ponies?
Here the magic is real, not a delirium, not a visual falsehood, it is tangible!! I can do magic, study it, understand it, a small childish desire comes back to give me a purpose to live.
Now I am not just another cog in a society that tries to get money for tomorrow without any ambition or purpose beyond surviving.
For the first time... I am living.
Tags: MLP: FiM, Adventure, Slice of Life, Human, Twilight, Celestia, Lyra, OC
By: Flash Point
I had more chapter on Fimfiction.
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Hello everyone! I just wanted to leave a small comment to thank those who have taken the time to read my fanfic. I would love to know what you think so far. Have you liked the direction the plot has taken? Or maybe there’s something you would like to see in future chapters? Any feedback, even if it's brief, would help me a lot to improve and keep writing with even more enthusiasm.
CH 25 review Really nice read, it is kind of surprising that theres MLP novels here, anyway the novel is really well writen and the intrige for magic coming from the mc is good, as a magic fan myself i really like it. The daily life setting is good and the fact that the mc has a lot of pottential but cant use all of it really pleases me, so good job!
Ch. 20 Review. It starts off great, but goes downhill by Chapter 11. That chapter is packed with all the tropes I hate. The power of destiny, stuff like strings of destiny becoming stronger and mysterious strangers noticing the main character because he awakened some great power. None of this improves the story. This is just the author showing off how powerful his MC is or will become. Nearly every chapter after ch.11 focuses solely on the main character leveling up his magic and abilities. There's barely any original storytelling beyond that. I think the constant training and power scaling could work if there were a crossover element introduced, or some other justification. For example, if this was DBZ and the MC knew about the future, him training would totally make sense. But this is MLP, what are the odds of people dying here...
good job with the story so far.[img=recommend]
This story is a very fun read I do wonder how the MC will fit into the main storyline and see what kind of butterfly effects he will bring be they good or bad truly a mystery.