Fate Severance: The Exiled Nemesis
Kaal wasn’t given a second chance.
He stole it.
Dragged from the ruins of his past and thrown into a world that does not forgive weakness, Kaal awakens with nothing but the weight of a broken life pressing against his spine.
The ground is painted with the blood of dreamers.
The skies weep for no one.
And here, mercy is not a virtue — it’s a death sentence.
He doesn’t seek to be a hero.
He doesn’t pretend to be a savior.
He moves because standing still means vanishing.
He fights because surrender is already a grave.
He survives because survival itself is an act of rebellion.
Each wound carved into his skin tells a story the world tried to silence.
Each step forward is a blade driven into the heart of fate.
They tried to erase him.
They should have buried him deeper.
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The story is captivating, the imagery and writing are vivid, along with being expressive. Updates are steady, with new chapters dropping almost every two days, which keeps the readers engaged and excited. The pacing is alright, storyline is connected. The dialogues are to be worked on. It can get cliche at points but there is always room for improvement with time. The worldbuilding is intricate, making it interesting, For now its just the start and there is more to come, I am looking for interesting characters and their past stories along with potential opponents, with realistic touch. Overall good one,
it has many twist .... the way od decribing scenery is cool the mc had a motive and story has a nice and UNIQUE aspect of levelling up i never heard of
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