Together: Where Names Don’t Matter
IMPORTANT NOTE:
Before you start the story, there are a few things you should know.
First of all, the beginning might feel a bit slow. The first six chapters are intentionally dense and a little vague. You’ll probably get a clearer sense of the story’s true shape and tone starting around chapter 7.
Second, my chapters are short — around 400–500 words each, except for the early ones. That’s just my current limit. Writing 1,500 words per chapter daily isn’t realistic for me at the moment. But if I get more used to writing regularly, I hope to make them longer in the future.
And finally, thank you so much for giving my story a chance. As a new author, I’m doing my best. Please don’t forget to leave a comment with your thoughts — I’ll do my best to reply to every one of them!
SYNOPSIS:
The Kingdom of Lindre was experiencing one of the most glorious periods in its history. After three long and harsh years of war, it had finally defeated Renalis and carved its name deeper into history.
Despite Lindre’s remarkable achievements, the situation for the kingdom’s nobility was far from ideal. The newly gained lands, treasures, and people had turned into tools of politics and greed inside the royal palace.
Amidst all this turmoil, one of those struggling to survive was Princess Alia Muriel Lindre, the youngest and third daughter of the royal family. Unfortunately, Alia’s past held an unpleasant incident that had made her time in the palace difficult. And now, caught in the whirlpool of political chaos, her challenges were only growing heavier.
However, Alia was not one to give up easily. She would cling to hope with all her strength and no matter what came her way, she was determined to reach the peace she longed for.
The main character feels a bit weird at times… but the writing? It’s emotional. If you’re looking for something that might make you tear up—this could be it. Just kidding (or maybe not). It’s honestly good, and the author does a great job of keeping everything mysterious.
Wow already hooked just reading 5 chapters. What can i say than just GIVE IT A READ!!. To be honest you will find some characters like edith annoying and not smart but still empathize with them. Alia is someone who needs this development she needs to understand your self and your going to love her. I know i do Definitely worth reading if you don’t like it then sue me!!!!🌚
The novel is good — you can really feel the emotions, and the writing style is solid. The descriptions, although not overly detailed, serve their purpose well. We can feel Alya’s weakness and her determination to change, and her transformation was gradual and logical. There’s also a nice element of mystery. However, regarding what I didn’t like — or what I consider to be mistakes the author could work on — one issue is that in an attempt to deepen the mystery, the author made the mistake of not showing the reason behind Alya’s childhood change from the start, or even giving us a hint. All we know is that something sudden happened in her past. There are also a few events that seem a bit illogical to me. If you added clear reasons to make them more convincing, or even replaced them, that might help. We understand Alya’s desire to change, but telling her maid to slap her whenever she cries — and in front of others? There are many more reasonable alternatives. Though, to be honest, this adds a strange and unique flavor to the story, especially if these scenes get unraveled later. I’d actually enjoy seeing people’s reactions when they suddenly witness Alya being slapped. On another note — Edith slapping Isolde out of anger — that’s completely illogical. No matter how much she loves her, she’s still a maid. How did she suddenly get the courage to slap a princess? She would definitely be executed. If what Isolde did to Alya was so terrible that Edith was ready to risk her life for it, I’d understand — but it was just harsh words, and it’s not like it was Alya’s first time hearing that kind of thing. Edith has likely witnessed similar things before too — that’s clear. So please try to make events a bit more logical, author. Best of luck to you, author, and I wish you success.
book has a lot of emotions which makes it great But may I point out to the author: 1. Character design changes (is design is inconsistent) 2. World building not that good but still deserves a three star for it at least but author is really trying great novel..keep up and become better
You've made a decent sstart and show lots of promise in your writing. My biggest concerns are the lack of details regarding the overall story after reading 5 chapters. I know little of the MC's motiviation, struggles or goals. Some of the dialogue does not suit the setting. Maintaining consistancy is important. Reading words that don't fit the ettings pulls me out of the story. Loving Edith as a character, but Alia has not really shown any redeeming qualities yet. She seems to drag the story more than push it forward. Overall, I would consider reworking the first few chapters to better settle the reader into your world with some deeper worldbuilding and fleshing out the characters goals and motivations. Keep it up! I'll keep my eye on this.