Different Legend of Juan

My first written piece, I tend to create a novel which not mainly focused on serious matters. And the tag 'Misunderstanding' fits the idea, there's a few written novel with tag as their main event, they all pretty much interesting, so I write one. I appreciate a review for better or for worst. :D

Another pinoy ahhahahhahahahahah. Taas natin ang bandera ng pilipinas dito. With the title i already have some guess that it was a pilipino writer because of the name juan. The idea is good, needs more chapter to evaluate the development. But overall it was good……………………………………………

For now, I'll give this novel a perfect rating of 5/5. I want to encourage the author to continue with his writing for I can sense his passion. I also believe that his novel has a great plot. Anyway, please allow me to point out the flaws that I noticed. * choice of words 1- The english language is not always about communication. It is also about aesthetics. Meaning, you should be able to expreas yourself in a creative way. A novel is a form of creative/descriptive writing.Therefore, It is not enough to just merely communicate your ideas with your audience. You need to arouse their interest and stimulate their imagination. *choice of words 2 - No need to use high ****tin' words. Impress them with your plot not with your boombastic words. * break it down - Try to put "-----------" in between paragraphs whenever you want to introduce another scene. Allow the line to serve as an indicator for a scene transition. By doing this, you will help your readers read with ease and avoid confusion. * consult google - If you are really having a hard time expressing a scene, ask. There are so many writing guides on the web. Or read novels! Take note how authors describe their scenes. List down the verbs and adjectives they used and of course include their meanings. Fighting! (づ￣ ³￣)づ

Grammatical errors here and there. Though the idea is quite unique, and I love it. I may have given a low rating basing on the first chapter's errors. Another thing, the number of chapters... We're having the same problem xD I don't update much.

Hi there! I really love the idea you actually put in your novel. It is actually really interesting and I am waiting for more chapters. There are still minor grammatical errors, but they are not that unbearable to read. Just review a few sentences and hope you could edit it. There is a certain part where the sentence fragment doesn't really complements the whole idea of the sentence. But great job tho :)

I really like how the author told the story. This seems promising, good job! Although there are problem with grammar, a good editor may fix it. Keep it up, I'll cheer for you.