Life Dealer System

Seem like this is one dropped.. have been waiting for quite a long time.. thought I have added it on my library. there is no updates. Really sad to see this one is over as well.

Author reporting for duty ! I made this realistic novel since I need a break of the fantasy novel I'm currently writing (Half-Giant Time Traveller). Read the description to know more about the novel. Anyway I write this for fun in my spare time. If you have a suggestion please write a constructive one. That is more appreciated than any cheer/hate review. Anything to make me a better author is appreciated. Cheers and enjoy!

Uhh has the novel been canceled? because we'd very much like some more... the grammar quality doesn't matter as much anymore as i'm now a definite fan and i'm starting to miss reading this...

This novel has a good concept and plot (I think it might have). The only problems are the constant errors. Not grammatic errors but text error where some paragraphs don't make sense due to the wording. Author, I have tip that you can use while editing your chapters. First write your chapter and then wait at least 30 min before editing your chapter. Before you wait the chapter ia still fresh in your head so everything makes sense for you. But after you wait you see the things you could have done better. This is why editors are so great. But I assume you can't get an editor so just follow the tip above and you'll be most likely off better. Ps. I got this tip from a experienced author, but I was too lazy to implement this into my novel, although I probably will do it.

chapter one what does a lightning strike victim need surgery for? ssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss

It doesn't have a deep character development and it's fast paced but nonetheless I liked it in it's own way so keep the good work. And work on your English more you need that.