Shikamaru Nara was going to sleep after his first birthday celebration when he was bombarded with visions of memories, barren wastelands of destruction and pale horned being destroying everything in their path, He was there as well with a blond-haired man with a golden Cloak and an Uchiha, trying to minimise the damage, the last thing he saw was a blast of energy from the eye in the beings palm before waking up screaming.
It’s like a robot is writing this... everything is very disconnected and it’s hard to get invested into the story. Would like to see a rewrite when the authors ability improves.
its a very good idea, the story has good development, and the writing quality is very good. the main complaints however are the fact that all chapters are extremely small, the lack of updates are also a big turn off, likewise the main problem being that if you haven't read or watched naruto in depth it would be impossible to follow as most of the chapters are very very vague. its basically a synopsis of what the author planned on writing. as in each paragraph is the "cut down explanation" of what essentially happened (excluding the minimum conversations). this could only work if the story is constantly updated or developed by longer chapters with more detailed descriptions of how things developed in such a way.