The Progenitor
Welcome to the Progenitor!
A life filled with sickness and failing health, a mind grew and developed in the silence of a hospital. With the company of a VR helmet, he became a god in that world, fighting against all odds just to leave his mark.
Now that he only has a few days left to live he hears a mysterious female’s voice. ”Crowley, your days are counting down and they only number in the several hours. In this time find out who your killer is. You have until you die to finish this quest.”
What does he have to lose?
No, the real question is what does he have to gain?
Enjoy the story of our hero as he is reborn into a new world with a special power, a new race that he controls!
Will he rise to power with his trashy creation magic?
Will he die in this new world too, leaving another world where he is only half fulfilled?
Who the hell is Dave?
Find out by reading The Progenitor!
[This is the spiritual rework of the Castle System so there will be many similarities. I just didn't like reading my own work so I put my soul into the rework. I hope you can see the blood, sweat, and tears!]
(keywords: Gun, Violence, Video Game, System, Fantasy, War, Kingdom, Building, Hunter, Castle, Reincarnation, Reincarnator, Lollipops, Dave, Progenitor, Rework)
As the writer I of course, will write this review with my thick skin all over my face area. This is the most beautiful blend of herbs and spices to create a fragrant aroma of a story. With just a little bit of salt added in to enhance the ingredients, and a touch of honey to balance well in the slow cooker. It has a serving size of one person, but if stretched out it can definitely fill the table with many tasty treats. As they say, when life gives you lemons, squeeze them gently over a nice thick slice of chicken and bake at a generous 400 degrees to properly let the juices soak with that citrusy flavor!
as of now (chaper 14), the character designs are done really well, they really feel like people, with unique ticks and personalities. 5/5 stars the story devellopment so far is solid, and the pempo just right. well, maybe a little rushed in his mental worlds army growth, but as long as the MC doesn't get too OP too fast from here on, that shouldn't be a problem. 5/5 stars world background. this one was done a bit too detailed for the VR world in the first chapters, the rest is fine, as far as i can tell. 4/5 stars the writing quality has some minor issues. the writer sometimes tries to put two or even three sentences into one without connecting their meaning properly, making them feel weird and very hard to understand. there are also some words that don't quite fit, as if the writer used autocorrect and didn't read it over afterwards. that being said the story is still very much readable, so still 4/5 stars. a last comment to the writer: tone down the quirkiness of the characters a bit and don't let the power levels escalate too fast, and this will be a wonderful story.
Could you please give us some more chapters or tell us if this is on hold or dropped it would be really appreciated... thank you for all that you have done so far is a great story I really do hope that you continue writing this story
Sounds great so far, army/kingdom building novels are my favourite :) The paths of evolution are thought out well. oof my oof or be oofed by the oof'iest oof that ever oofed.
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its's the same as castle system but with different names. .................................................................................................................. ..........................................................................................................