After dying in a store robbery, Reborn as Collin in a world of magic, and after being told that he has no real magic power to be a magic knight, he sets off on a world changing adventure to become stronger.
It has potential. I like the fast pace, although it might be good to experiment with the pacing so you get a variety throughout the story. I like that you don't get mobbed down with visual exposition but focus directly on the story. With a little refinement, this could be really good. I look forward to reading more.
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It has potential. I like the fast pace, although it might be good to experiment with the pacing so you get a variety throughout the story. I like that you don't get mobbed down with visual exposition but focus directly on the story. With a little refinement, this could be really good. I look forward to reading more.