Poor unlucky John...the last of his family, his brother, died and all he's left with are the massive debts his parents left behind. His brother has also left him with a special edition capsule for latest VRMMO. While he envisioned them playing together, at he's given John the tools to hopefully pull himself out of the gole and create his own legend!
Um....did we mention our hapless MC is unlucky?? Qhat ensues is hilarity as he builds his own legend in-game!
5 years ago
21
Gobbo_
I don’t even know what’s going on, the writing is so bad. It at least has an Interesting premise though. The book has an obvious non native english speaking author. No world background (that I could tell) and if there was any character development in the dialogue then I couldn’t tell.
I think the titan character race could do with being a bit more unique besides just “imagine a man... but big..” but that’s just a nitpick.
If the author gets better at English or gets an editor that doesn’t mind all the work it would entail to edit this then this honestly would be a good story I think. We need more crafting stories overall.
5 years ago
10
1AB
just read it. it's amazing.
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5 years ago
8
Daoist800287
haha this was the best novel I can wait and read me self into its fun it has good story line and many good characters especially scrappy nice boot
5 years ago
7
ContesaRubia
I just found this story tonight, and the first few chapters were such a Turn OFF. THE TUTORIAL TAUGHT NOTHING, JUST PISSED ME OFF.
SHOULD CHANGE THE NAME OF THE STORY TO
ONLINE DUNGEONMASTER, which would be more inline with the actual story, not this DECEPTIVE NAME IT HAS NOW.
5 years ago
6
mohamad24xx
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5 years ago
3
Alvianosi
Dropped
You know why.
A lot of people left valid criticism yet you never respond to them.
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5 years ago
3
MicahPhillipS1
Congrats, there aren't enough words to describe how annoying reading this thing was...you attempted a story good job but damn...I had hope when he met the blacksmith but no...you kill him, give him some OP thing, take it away and give him some random thing that is basically pointless at this stage...excellent my friend excellent
5 years ago
2
GodGenoVirus
It a novel full of potential and is very original There are many things that can be improved like the Je got if the chapter but it coming along pretty well.
5 years ago
2
DaNepz
Was very fun to read and I enjoyed the story. Great work.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
5 years ago
2
Malkav907
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5 years ago
1
W_Trevor_Dowe
All hail Scrappy the best and only god in the kingdoms. I need more Scrappy and I neep Scrappy to reconnect with John again before the war starts
5 years ago
1
Cassa1
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5 years ago
1
DragonFeather
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5 years ago
1
Daytwon_Bledsoe
1 love this one it was me dieing laughing, already recommended to a few friends, hope the creator has other books...........................
Poor unlucky John...the last of his family, his brother, died and all he's left with are the massive debts his parents left behind. His brother has also left him with a special edition capsule for latest VRMMO. While he envisioned them playing together, at he's given John the tools to hopefully pull himself out of the gole and create his own legend! Um....did we mention our hapless MC is unlucky?? Qhat ensues is hilarity as he builds his own legend in-game!
I don’t even know what’s going on, the writing is so bad. It at least has an Interesting premise though. The book has an obvious non native english speaking author. No world background (that I could tell) and if there was any character development in the dialogue then I couldn’t tell. I think the titan character race could do with being a bit more unique besides just “imagine a man... but big..” but that’s just a nitpick. If the author gets better at English or gets an editor that doesn’t mind all the work it would entail to edit this then this honestly would be a good story I think. We need more crafting stories overall.
just read it. it's amazing. 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters
haha this was the best novel I can wait and read me self into its fun it has good story line and many good characters especially scrappy nice boot
I just found this story tonight, and the first few chapters were such a Turn OFF. THE TUTORIAL TAUGHT NOTHING, JUST PISSED ME OFF. SHOULD CHANGE THE NAME OF THE STORY TO ONLINE DUNGEONMASTER, which would be more inline with the actual story, not this DECEPTIVE NAME IT HAS NOW.
Reveal Spoiler
Dropped You know why. A lot of people left valid criticism yet you never respond to them. -----------------------------------------------------------------------
Congrats, there aren't enough words to describe how annoying reading this thing was...you attempted a story good job but damn...I had hope when he met the blacksmith but no...you kill him, give him some OP thing, take it away and give him some random thing that is basically pointless at this stage...excellent my friend excellent
It a novel full of potential and is very original There are many things that can be improved like the Je got if the chapter but it coming along pretty well.
Was very fun to read and I enjoyed the story. Great work.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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All hail Scrappy the best and only god in the kingdoms. I need more Scrappy and I neep Scrappy to reconnect with John again before the war starts
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1 love this one it was me dieing laughing, already recommended to a few friends, hope the creator has other books...........................