Jason Arm is a normal guy that may or may not have accidentally pissed off a few too many people, and now he has a first-class ticket to the isekai train. His new body is not what he wanted, and it brings various problems. Will he be able to thrive in a world where people can't tell that he's a boy. As well as dealing with issues from his past.

Being reincarnated into a fantasy world was supposed to be fun

REINCARNATION

SYSTEM

COMEDY

Since there is only one chapter, this review could mean nothing and should be taken with a grain of salt as I too, am just an a m a t e u r writer.
First off, I don't understand who is narrating and what person (2/nd and 3/rd) the story is being told in. 
The starting paragraph doesn't really captivate the reader too much, and it shows a lack of effort put into it. (What I'm saying is — it sounds like the story is beginning with someone just telling the story at a dinner table or something. 
Grammar is alright and nothing that's unreadable or anything, so that's nice. 
I however, can't get a picture in my head of what I'm witnessing here. There are no descriptions of anyone basically, and no real location I can imagine. Yes, he was in a bar, but where is he now? The street? The bar? The bathroom? I don't know. 
This is a comedy, as clearly labeled by the author. And there is a lot of cussing. So if you like curse words and immaturity this might be a very well read for you. (Not my cup of tea personally) 
I'm also not very used to seeing names followed by a ":" and then they talk. It makes the dialogue bland and lacks emphasis. 
The story has potential if it's consistent and appeals to a certain audience other than myself. 
Once again, I personally don't read Harem/Comedy/System, so this review can mean nothing to you. It's just some of my thoughts with an unbiased rating. 
Keep writing and improving! Cuz that's what writing is about!

Okay, so what I love about this novel is it's funny, The characters are amazing love the plot, the story development, Keep it up Author love your work!!

You should put a meme and parodies tags here!!!!😂😂😂 Anyway.. The idea is pretty good, but, this chapter seems rushed. There are also things that can be fix about the way you narrates this story. I recommend to use third person Point of View when you write more chapters. Well, I can't say much because you only have one chapter for now. I will review again when you have more chapters!! Don't give up!! 
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