Milky Legends (English)

I am very happy if you are interested and like reading this story. I am sure that in writing this story there are still many shortcomings, your criticism and comments are very meaningful to the Author. Thank you very much.

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The best part of this work is the novelty behind its hybrid concept which incorporates the use of both magic and technology within its world. That's definitely an interesting new idea worthy of being praised in and of itself. However, the thing that hinders this from getting more attention is probably the writing. Let me comment on the ff points: Writing - needs improvement. In the early chapters that I've read, I pointed out quite a few errors and suggestions on how to possibly remedy them. I noticed about the overuse of character names in every chapter (every paragraph, esp). Please proofread and edit. Utilize some pronouns (he, she, his, her, etc.) to make the read more pleasant. Also, make the dialogues more interactive by adding emotions to the characters' thoughts and actions. Instead of saying "___ said", try being creative by putting it this way "___ knitted his eyebrows in confusion after hearing those words from her" or something. I think its more fun that way. Stability - keep it up Characters - they were well-described, tho I prefer a slow-burn *romance??* between the two leads, because hehe.... Maybe that's just meh. Development and World - vis-a-vis my comment on the writing. The imagination behind the world is really commendable, and I'm sure it can be improved with more practice. Cheers 🥂

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wow nice one author san... your ideas are fresh, nice plots and good characters I really like it...keep up the good work. May your ideas never run out.

Hey.. ooops sorrry I didn't know how to review before. Well I already told it's something new what I read normally. so yes it's really good with good content and story line.keep up with your good work 💜